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greenwich
post Dec 21 16, 15:42
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I laughed from the window ledge,
a wadling Puffin
walking down the busy street,
wings covering eyes.
He was lost
unless he had planned this a thousand times,
to espy the vanquished,
those universal global warmers -
the tombstone sayers of Acacia Avenue.
There's too much of the wrong traffic
daily debating those diesel fumes.


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post Jan 4 17, 18:44
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I enjoyed this Antony - just a few comments below.

I laughed from the window ledge,
a wadling Puffin
walking down the busy street,

Perhaps it would be more concise to say

a puffin waddling
down the busy street.

2 'dd's in waddling

wings covering eyes.
He was lost
unless he had planned this a thousand times,
to espy the vanquished,
those universal global warmers -
the tombstone sayers of Acacia Avenue.
There's too much of the wrong traffic
daily debating those diesel fumes.

Happy New Year Antony!

Eira



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post Jan 6 17, 13:53
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Thank you for the review and a happy New Year to all


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post Jan 9 17, 00:10
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Hi Antony,
I laughed at the waddling puffin (with two d's, of course).
But this is a serious issue. I like your poetic wording of it. Not sure where Acacia Avenue is, but never mind.

The final lines are a protest; I agree with you. Good alliteration in the last line, with those 'd' words.

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I laughed from the window ledge,
a wadling Puffin
walking down the busy street,
wings covering eyes.
He was lost
unless he had planned this a thousand times,
to espy the vanquished,
those universal global warmers -
the tombstone sayers of Acacia Avenue.
There's too much of the wrong traffic
daily debating those diesel fumes.



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