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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ IBPC Monthly Nominations and Results _ MM's Selection for June comp

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 3 13, 05:06

from the sticky topic above:

Lori, I would like to nominate Snow's poem Survival for IBPC. It can be found at the following link (hopefully):

http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=15993

I've dragged this out of the archives and made a few changes.


Survival

I wait
... ensconced inside my sphagnum hide
while unsuspecting creatures forage near.
My escalating hunger won't subside
as odours saturate the atmosphere.

Vibrations stir the undergrowth, I feel
a scurry close but I'm concealed among
the moss and lie stock-still. I hear a squeal,
obtain a scent by flickering my tongue.

Strike!
... I quickly coil around him; death's
embrace, his limbs grow limp. Deprived of claws,
I seize head-on and taste his final breath,
while muscle rhythms draw him through my jaws.

Engorged, I glide towards a hiding place
where shadows camouflage from passing beast;
inside a cave I curl, yet heed them pace
outside, as I digest my rattus feast.


I'm so glad Eisa brought it out of the archives. I'd never seen it before. I think it's an outstanding piece, showing a part of nature that we seldom reflect on. Not so specifically, I mean.

I think she wants to nip one word out, but probably not much else.

Hope you agree, Lori! JackBox.gif

Hugs,
Syl*** lovie.gif

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 6 13, 17:31

This poem has been sent for the June competition.

Best of luck Snow! cheer.gif

~Cleo galadriel.gif

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