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 Apr 29 16, 15:15
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 Assyrian  Posts: 256 Joined: 2-November 15 From: Croydon, Surrey Member No.: 5,284 Real Name: Antony Glaser Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eira Rhaposdy  |
Longing to cling to the past.
I randomly add vinyl to my already collection. Like a drunkard the emphasis becomes over abundance. A tableau is nearing: over extension turns to bewilderment, becoming the storage issue. Dust finds prevarication loitering on record spines. I am the present, unflatteringly a hoarder an embarrassed child in a sweet shop. ·······  ·······Imagination fires the soul, resolution the longing.
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Apr 29 16, 16:55
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Another interesting one from you, Antony.
Longing to cling to the past. Perhaps 'cling to the past' is a little cliche I randomly add vinyl to my already collection. Perhaps existing collection? Like a drunkard the emphasis becomes over abundance. A tableau is nearing: over extension turns to bewilderment, becoming the storage issue. Dust finds prevarication loitering on record spines. I am the present, unflatteringly a hoarder an embarrassed child in a sweet shop. Yes, I'm a hoarder too, Antony! Eira ······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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May 5 16, 00:20
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 8,865 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Always some interesting piece from you, Antony. Not much to nit. I agree with Eisa's suggestions.
QUOTE (greenwich @ Apr 29 16, 17:15 )  Longing to cling to the past.<<<<The first line needs changing. I randomly add vinyl to my already collection.<<<<<Yes, 'existing' or some similar Word would flow nicely. Like a drunkard the emphasis becomes over abundance. A tableau is nearing: over extension turns to bewilderment, becoming the storage issue.<<<<<I like the way this progresses into a serious issue of storage! Dust finds prevarication loitering on record spines. I am the present, unflatteringly a hoarder an embarrassed child in a sweet shop. Quite amusing, really...I also hoard some stuff, but having moved house several times, many things got left behind. Good read, Syl ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner      |
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