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> July IBPC Nomination - Declined: Published, Uncharted Bends by Psyche
Eisa
post Jun 23 13, 17:33
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I would like to nominate Syl's poem, Uncharted Bends, found in Seren's HERE.

It is a beautiful poem that transports the reader back to childhood days, but with a thought provoking twist in the end.


Uncharted Bends by Sylvia Maclagan

When I was a child, bubbles and dewdrops
were magical instants in my forever days.
I’d prance to the brief lifelines
of butterflies swarming over alfalfa crops,
giggle at sparrows flapping wings in dust baths,
harken to birds' pecks in luscious grapevines.

Daydreams were true as stalwart
poplars bending to mighty winds
or fields of maize crinkling in breezes.

From the nearby river's edge,
I'd skip bare-skinned into rippling waters
to quench my thirst;
swirling forward under noonday haze
I’d sense freedom in summer’s air
along meandering shores
where flows reversed.

Uncharted bends patterned moist flatlands
alive with sounds of mimicking mutants.

Relentless light shone down on my head
as I relished the immediacy of cold water.
Floating downstream on my back, I heeded
the echoing emptiness of the wilds.

Grasshoppers, sunflowers, our sturdy homestead,
-like your hand in mine now that my legs falter-
everything holds enduring truths to a child.

Copyright © Sylvia Maclagan


This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Jun 27 13, 10:03
Reason for edit: Revision posted


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post Jun 24 13, 08:16
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Beautiful poem and great nom, Snow! cheer.gif

I have replied to you and Sylvia via the July IBPC thread in the staff forum. Syl - please let me know if you make any changes before the 1st.

Cheers,
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Psyche
post Jun 27 13, 02:06
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Delighted with the nom, thank you Snow!

I've made some small changes after Lori's comments.

Hugs,

Syl***



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"There is no life higher than the grasstops
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Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



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post Jun 29 13, 09:12
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Great! I've got the latest revision in my file and will be sending tomorrow. sun.gif

Good luck!
~Cleo sun.gif


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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings

Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind.

"I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter

Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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post Jun 29 13, 19:43
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Hey, Cleo, I'm afraid you can't send in this poem because it has been published. chilly.gif

I've been too busy with personal matters to think about this issue, so sorry.

Thanks all the same, Snow, for the nomination. I'm still very pleased.
And thank you both for the great suggestions. cloud9.gif

Cheers,
Syl***




QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Jun 29 13, 12:12 ) *
Great! I've got the latest revision in my file and will be sending tomorrow. sun.gif

Good luck!
~Cleo sun.gif


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"There is no life higher than the grasstops
Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind
Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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Cleo_Serapis
post Jun 30 13, 07:42
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Oh well Syl - that's ok. At least it brought this lovely poem to attention! sun.gif

Thanks for letting me know - I have removed it from the IBPC email I'm sending now.

Cheers,
~Cleo galadriel.gif


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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings

Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind.

"I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter

Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

"Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.

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