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 Jan 22 18, 04:36
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry  |
Train Journey
No excitement— slow rotation… wheels slip brake shoes, dynamic motors grumble— pulse; carriages exhale in a rush of grit and dust. Un-tethered the silvered eel dissolves into the black-circle of enchantment— screaming with fright. Within the train Sway— rattle— bounce. We sit Rae and me, knees barely apart— our thoughts blended silence. Arnfinn © 2018 ·······  ·······Arnfinn
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Feb 8 18, 13:41
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,578 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Ah... NOW I see your silvered eel squirming along the tracks! Thanks.
but... We = Rae and I (sat).... me didn't sit! sLightly confused, Daniel 
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Arnfinn Train Journey Jan 22 18, 04:36 
JustDaniel An enchanting picture, John. I like it.
Not sure... Jan 23 18, 11:54 Arnfinn G'day Daniel.
Thank you for your comments--a ... Jan 30 18, 04:58 RC James Arnfinn - Love train poems - rhythm of the blues t... Jan 31 18, 15:26 Arnfinn G'day R C
The subway, train stations, are fu... Feb 6 18, 23:35 
greenwich instead of motor why not engine. You have already... Aug 10 18, 09:57 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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