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Posted by: JustDaniel Oct 25 06, 07:30

Shadorma

Shadorma [ shad-oor-muh ] is a syllabic poetic form reminiscent of haiku and tanka; it is written either as a single sestet or a series of sestets, each with a syllable count of 3-5-3-3-7-5. It is reportedly of Spanish origin, created by court poets from the 14th – 15th centuries, though I have found no original sources of this. Any input or correction from others would be much appreciated, for the sake of accuracy.

Here’s one example of my own… with a bit of word play:

dream state

sleeplessness
dreams in broad daylight
half a wake
unaware
it's tolled eyes to take a knap
to see what's inside

© MLee Dickens'son

Posted by: JustDaniel Oct 26 06, 09:43

sub-polar low

eye can sense
wake from manic whirl
arising
'mid debris
strewn over skewed horizon
lifting fog a blur

© MLee Dickens'son 26 Oct 2006

Posted by: Cathy Oct 26 06, 15:01

Inspiration

Heaven's veil
will softly shimmer
like fireflies;
starlit nights
then harvest a host of dreams
that set me adrift,

inspiring
imagination
to fly with
fairy wings,
claiming far-fetched fantasies
to etch on my page.

Cathy Bollhoefer
copyright Oct 2006

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Oct 28 06, 08:10

Hi Daniel.

The only other item I have found to note about Shadorma is that it should have un-rhymed lines.

Here is my first attempt at this form:

Cauldron brews,
souls' bewitching charms
casting spells
ghoulishly
unbeknownst to invited
misplaced dinner guests.

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Oct 28 06, 08:12

QUOTE (Cathy @ Oct 26 06, 16:01 )

Cathy,

this is a lovely

response to this form!

Heaven's veil as the opener really sets the tone for what is to come. harvest those fairy wings!
Well done!
~Cleo

Posted by: Cathy Oct 28 06, 08:47

QUOTE

Cauldron brews,
souls' bewitching charms
casting spells
ghoulishly
unbeknownst to invited
misplaced dinner guests.

You've brewed up the perfect Shadorma for the season!

Thanks for the comments on mine!

Cathy

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Oct 28 06, 09:04

Thanks Cathy.