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post Apr 13 10, 06:03
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George hurried home for a nooner
When he was eclipsed by a lunar
Missing his mark
There in the dark
Poor George instead faced a mooner


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post Apr 13 10, 16:43
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Hi Sam,

I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon.

Peggy


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I would add a beat to the last line - you could do so easily with "Georgie".

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post Apr 14 10, 11:18
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QUOTE (Peggy Carpenter Harwood @ Apr 13 10, 16:43 ) *
Hi Sam,

I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon.

Peggy


The intent was to rhyme with nooner, nothing more. It's a limerick. wink.gif

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post Apr 14 10, 11:22
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Apr 14 10, 07:13 ) *
LOL.gif!

I would add a beat to the last line - you could do so easily with "Georgie".

Fun read!
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George hurried home for a nooner
When he was eclipsed by a lunar
Missing his mark
There in the dark
Poor Georgie instead faced a mooner

Thanks Lori laugh.gif

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