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 Apr 27 13, 03:31
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry  |
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Number of downloads: 3I Know You Are up There ‘I know you are up there. You are in the open blue glimpse of cirrus. Therefore, here’s my invitation to come down and shake my hand. Yep! I have read and heard so much about you— mate; you can change my life, overturn- a disgusting run of bad luck. My love life has hit a bad patch; I’m well…not travelling too well in the financial stakes; he, he, I bet you could change things with a couple of shakes of that ‘good shepherds’ crook you’ve shoved down the back of your trousers.’ ‘I mean for God’s sake! Oh, excuse me; ‘God’s sake’ is common expletive down here. And I mean no disrespect. I’m truly calling upon you to treat me as good loyal friends, which I am, mate’ ‘Yesireeeeeeeeeeeeeee’ ‘Mate— I love ya, when you were down here in AD you killed them with kindness, turned the other cheek, had a water-fed winery and controlled a monopoly on bread shops and fish markets, cured invalids, and were into bush fires. One of your greatest— ya got rid of those taxing bludgers, ya whipped the bastards. Oh, excuse me mate; ‘bastard’ is another expletive and I understand the ‘B’ word is a delicate subject re: ‘the old man.’ ‘Yeeeeeeeeha’ ‘Now, I not asking for much— I’m not greedy. Nup! All I’m asking is to, sort of; send an Emissary down with say… ten million American dollars shoved in a backpack between his/her angelic wings. If you could see fit to carry out this request, I’ll get all the boys at the ‘local’ this Friday, to raise a glass and thank you for your generosity.’ Eh! ‘Hey! It is starting to rain damn it! The skies turning black; what the Hells going on— oh, excuse me… Bloody, excuse me, thunder and lightning; ‘oo’eer, it’s blowing a cyclonic gale!’ ‘Sorry your Lordship’ ‘Jezzzezz, a dog just flew past dragging its chain…Cripes! I’ll have to grab onto this bough or I’ll be blown to friggin Hell.’ Excuse me, excuse me. Hail Mary full of grace.’ Some-time later. ‘Ah, thank goodness the wind has abated. He, he, you didn’t catch me out that time your Worship.’ ‘Hey, it’s snowing? Hang on, that’s money; American hundred dollar notes!’ ‘YeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeHa’ Sitting in kitchen. ‘Whew! I’ve been up all night counting the loot-- I can’t believe it, ten million American dollars!’ Thud! ‘What’s that?’ ‘Oh, today’s newspaper flew in my sitting-room window. Oh my Gosh; look at the headlines. ARMOURED CAR BLOWN OVER IN SNAP CYCLONE ‘ ‘Hmm…Let me see.’ [Thursday 25th September, a ‘Thompson Express’ armoured car, on Highway 21, travelling through Windsor, was blown over by a cyclonic gale. The force of the impact was so severe that the vans rear security doors buckled and flew open releasing a sum of American currency into the atmosphere. A spokesman for the armoured car company’s insurance underwriter, Alliance 1st National, said, ‘I am of the opinion that the velocity of the wind was such— that the money will never be recovered.] ‘Mate! You’ve done it. You’ve created another bloody Miracle! Come on down mate— my friend—let me shake your hand. Let me introduce you to all my mates at the boozer.’ ‘I’ll be waiting… I know you are up there.’ John Macleod © 2010 ·······  ·······Arnfinn
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Apr 27 13, 04:00
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 Egyptian  Posts: 399 Joined: 11-April 13 From: Australia - The great Southern Land Member No.: 5,178 Real Name: Maureen Clifford Writer of: Poetry Referred By:arnfinn |
  in your dreams JohnCheers Maureen ······· ······· |
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Apr 27 13, 17:52
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
This is brilliant, John.
 I think you should find the right magazine and submit it for publication. You have such imagination - well written too. Snow 
······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner      |
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Apr 28 13, 00:36
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 8,861 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
John, you've had me laughing all the way thru'  Wouldn't know where to even begin to crit. So, as Snow suggests, why not send it in for publication somewhere? Love this one! ‘ QUOTE Mate— I love ya, when you were down here in AD you killed them with kindness, turned the other cheek, had a water-fed winery and controlled a monopoly on bread shops and fish markets, cured invalids, and were into bush fires. One of your greatest— ya got rid of those taxing bludgers, ya whipped the bastards. Oh, excuse me mate; ‘bastard’ is another expletive and I understand the ‘B’ word is a delicate subject re: ‘the old man.’ Glad you're back, Arnie! Cheers, mate! Syl*** ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner     |
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Apr 28 13, 23:08
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
Maureen, Snow and Sylv,
Life is too serious, more humour is the way to go.   Regards, John ······· ·······Arnfinn
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Oct 21 13, 20:01
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 Babylonian Posts: 69 Joined: 24-February 05 From: Houma, LA Member No.: 101 Real Name: Leigh Ann Writer of: Poetry |
Love love love this!!! I agree with the consensus on here, this should be in print somewhere. Best thing I've read so far this week!
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Oct 22 13, 07:20
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 Egyptian Posts: 327 Joined: 17-May 08 From: San Juan Puerto Rico Member No.: 508 Real Name: Sergio Ortiz Writer of: Poetry |
Very nice, I loved the humor.
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Oct 22 13, 17:15
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Mosaic Master Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
LOL! This has given me a laugh again, Arnie. I hope you get it published somewhere!
Snow
······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner |
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