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Jan 7 16, 08:18
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Forever Grateful
Stones are like jewels, when I appreciate your simplicity of the glee you show in sharing yourself. The house we could furnish with oyster shell walls and a paper chase with enough love notes to illuminate the potting shed.
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Jan 8 16, 00:30
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Hi Anthony,
Just read your poem. It's lovely and it intrigues me. The thought of furnishing the house with oyster shell walls is so delightful! (I believe 'shell' goes without the plural, if I've understood correctly).
I don't know what a paper chase is, but that's just me, I don't speak English where I live. Will look it up.
The final lines are wonderful. Your poem beams with love and originality of expression. I confess to not understanding the entire meaning of it. If you wish to give me a hint or two I'd be grateful. The first three lines stump me, sorry!
Cheers, Syl***QUOTE (greenwich @ Jan 7 16, 11:18 ) Forever Grateful
Stones are like jewels, when I appreciate your simplicity of the glee you show in sharing yourself. The house we could furnish with oyster shells walls and a paper chase with enough love notes to illuminate the potting shed.
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Jan 10 16, 08:41
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Hi Antony,
like Syl, I don't completely understand this one but this hasn't spoilt my enjoyment of reading it.
Forever Grateful
Stones are like jewels, when I appreciate your simplicity of the glee you show in sharing yourself.
What I take from these first lines is the person written about finds pleasure in doing things for you which makes you so happy that even stones seem like jewels.
The house we could furnish with oyster shell walls and a paper chase with enough love notes to illuminate the potting shed.
Wonderful descriptions here - I love oyster shell walls! A paper chase with love notes is lovely too, but I can't see the relevance of the potting shed. Is this where love notes are kept? I would love to see a little more details in this to help the reader along. However it is full of beautiful descriptions which I enjoyed.
Eira
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Jan 10 16, 14:41
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Eira you have read the poem perfectly. The narrator is happy to feel closeness to someone He is aware his feelings are tentative so the comparsion to stones yet jewels is what he feels. He is also imagining a scenario with the person he loves, with sea shells and pasted love letters illuminating the garden shed Maybe a paper trail more than paper chase
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Jan 11 16, 18:22
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Thanks Krista for your valuable comments
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Jan 12 16, 10:44
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Good job. I like short poems that get the job done. A few images tell a love story and the potting shed is love itself...least the way I read it. no nits
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Jan 16 16, 10:01
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Greenwich - Very tender, straightforward and compelling. RC
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