Mima Mounds Options

[Guest_Brahms_*]

Floating morning fog
covering horse and cow hooves
curious swelled lumping.

Upland breeze reveals
gentle moving manes below
mounding terraced hills.

Symmetrically shaped
each 4 foot tall 20 feet wide
thirty feet from each.

Amazing mis-understood
geologic cross-sectioning not differing
neighboring strata layers.

Ancient native cast
from old Indian pattern myth
using same geo layers?

Native not likely made
so similar geologic layered land
so alien bewitching?

Irrespective misunderstood
our white-man attempted reasons
no explanation made.

Halted air now fogged
horse and cattle step away
Mima Mound herd stays.

[Cybele]

Ah! Stephen!

So that is what they are.     Not a breed of cattle ...Duh!!

This is quite lovely, even a little mystic.  It would seem that we have similar things over here, which have been labelled burial chambers ~ although no-one seems to know for sure.

In Karnak Crossing we have a haiku tile Stephen, and Daniel and I are just discussing starting a senryu tile as well, Since you seem to love haiku as well why don't you join us?  I have fallen in love with this kind of poetry.


Love

Grace

[Guest_Brahms_*]

Grace, thank you for the haiku section directing.
This is the form closest to my nature though
having not written for a while I may not be
true to that form.  As for the Mima mounds,
like the haiku form, they simply stand gracing
their pastoral location not caring if they are
understood, like those occational moments
we each have.  To mysteries remained,

Stephen

[Guest_Jox_*]

Hi Stephen,

This is good stuff. If any form in poetry is worth the effort (a good question!), the haiku must be it. The simplicity is in harmony with what poetry seeks to be: a minimalist art-form.

Your collection of "linked" haikus are very good indeed; much appreciated.

You've put this for crit and I feel really churlish offering one on syllables but I think I would pronounce "twenty" as "twen-ty". This really gets my goat that we are "supposed" to have syllable counts. It is only in the last hundred years or so that Westerners have opted for 5-7-5 - there are alternatives and, personally, I would be quite happy to put any number of syllables in... so don't change anything for me, please! But, since you posted here I thought I'd make the point and now I feel really bad that I have because I would prefer you not to alter anything - just say "twenty" quickly and no one else will know!

Cheerio.

PS I walk the dogs in a local woodland and there is a 4,000 year old burial mound there. It is about ten feet high... were people very fat in those days? Just a thought.

[Guest_Brahms_*]

Hey Jox, hello and very good to sit alongside you
at this poetic campfire.  I super appreciated your
trmendous bardic talent as well devotion to the
truth of the matter.  As example you reminding us
that the haiku 5-7-5 is our western attempt.
Trying to be true to the haiku-ic response to
wonder, I likewise am not Presidentially caught
up in adherance the our haiku form.  What is
important is our response to the wonder of
surprise, so I raise my Pacific Northwest
coffee mug to thee with share smiles.
So nice to be back with you all,

Stephen

[Guest_Tao_*]

Hi Stephen,

I'm not one good with syll counts, so I'll not treat these as haikus. But as a complete thought, it's very Brahms, full of farm animals, pasture and peace. Great homage to the Indians and thoughtful sentiments -

I'll just take on the first three stanza. Please take or toss...

Floating morning fog
covering horse and cow hooves
curious swelled lumping. - is this one Mima Mound or one hoove?

Upland breeze reveals
gentle moving manes below - gently? though that would add syll
mounding terraced hills.

Symmetrically shaped
each 4 foot tall 20 feet wide - each four by twenty wide?
thirty feet from each.

Or, was it   bewitching?

David

[Guest_Brahms_*]

Good morning, Tao.  The first curious swelled lumping
is intentionly vague allowing both mounds & animals.

Yes, my use of syllables in haiku is weak, a result of
the after-affect of that logging accident I had and
occational difficulty with simple brain processing.

Last, those bewitching Mima Mounds are perfectly
round, quickly sloping up near 4' to then flatten
or gently swell across to the other side maybe
20 feet across.  Maybe inaccurate, just visual
guesses.  And these odd lumps are symmetrically
spaced apart maybe 30 feet.  So strange,
it is like some finished art work from the nearby
Art School if there was.  Consensis is the Mima
Mounds are not understood by us modern people
allowing absurd possibility like Martians had shot
some kind of ground-raising ray making playful
patterns.  Along with all my words they sit
peacefully enjoying this morning and our
poetic word-play.

Country-wise bewitched,
Stephen

[Guest_Tao_*]

Good Morning Stephen,

Just to clarify, I was also questioning whether lumping should be singular or plural since hooves and mounds both were. Or is lumping plural as is?

Floating morning fog
covering horse and cow hooves
curious swelled lumping. - is this one Mima Mound or one hoove?

There are many mysteries left on earth, like the statues, boulders really, on Easter Island, or those expansive drawings on the high plains in South America that can only be discerned from the air. I think we give ancient civilizations much less credit than they deserve. And when they do something we have difficulty replicating, we start to think they had alien help. It's possible...but they could have managed on their own.

David :)

[Guest_Brahms_*]

Best to you, David.  My haiku-like markings
are like those swelled circular
Mima Mounds whose meaning may be
alien to all but the author.
My placing of those 'hoove and mound'
and the matter of being plural  ~ are
fogged and perhaps incorrect in their
use in my haiku.  That inaccuracy is a
result of the head injury from the logging
fall I had where I had to relearn many
rules of common English ~ as well keep
using those re-establish guides.

Oh for our fogged dealings with wonder,
Stephen

[Guest_Tao_*]

Stephen,

Take care of the noggin now...hey, you're the author, you make the rules and we'll play along!

David

[JustDaniel]

would it be unSound
to have a pocket gopher
burrow in your tile?

or might that create
a St. Helens seismic-type
miniature bump?

on my next trip home
I'd love to link up with you
for a prairie tour

deLightingly, Daniel  :sun: