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post Jan 26 17, 13:52
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Swallow whole a stranded whale
carcass to finite outage.
Neutrons to transform the alter ego,
the destructibility of dreams.
Spectrum space no 9
will lobotomise humanities failings.
Quaint were the inanimate feelings
in a previous skin.
Automatons progression
shed the vessel,
a new plain will unfold
subject matter obsolete.

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From the spaceships console he espies
a stranded shuttle .
Electronic snowflakes flash across his eye
His momentary response is to swallow it
as if its wreckage were a by-products outage,
Neutrons projects the new ergo,
the destructibility of dreams.
Spectrum space station no 9
will lobotomise humanities failings.
Inanimate feelings were quaint
in a previous skin
Automatons progression
shed this vessel,
a new plain will unfold
past subject matter obsolete.


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Psyche
post Jan 27 17, 23:02
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Hi Antony,
I'm attracted to the wording of your poem, but must confess I don't know its meaning. I could make some guesses, but don't want to appear totally daft... LOL.

What is 272? Oh, well, I'll take a look. It seems you're replying to a previous poem.
So glad to see you posting again.
Best, Syl butterfly.gif


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post Jan 29 17, 13:54
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Poem is about half human half robot with a new bionic eye reconvening perception


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post Jan 30 17, 16:30
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Hi Antony,

I'm finding it difficult to get my head round this on 1st read, although your explanation to Syl has helped. This is very imaginative and I love the language.

Quaint were the inanimate feelings
in a previous skin.


I keep reading this as

Inanimate feelings were quaint
in a previous skin.


Probably just me.

Eira


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