I rather like it - but do so wish you had punctuated it as there are some areas where the reader could pause which I supect are totally wrong. I'm old school - don't hold with the
no punctuation required concept that many use these days (sorry).
eg
I visualize and imagine.
Feel quiet peace within
my cat like paws.
Lead me softly to truth
or
I visualize and imagine,
feel quiet peace within.
My cat like paws
lead me softly to truth
and maybe neither of them are right either.
Cheers
Maureen