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 Sep 30 07, 05:39
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 Assyrian  Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A  |
Lady Poet A lady is a wonder, so I find A treasure steeped in pleasure to behold Her feminine mystique I find divine Divinely found more precious now than gold Sweet Lady Poet may I be so bold To thank you for the kindness in your heart And friendship that you’ve seen so fit to start Thank you Pami Rime Royal is a rhyming stanza form that was introduced into English poetry by Geoffrey Chaucer. The Rime Royal stanza consists of seven lines, usually in iambic pentameter. The rhyme scheme is a-b-a-b-b-c-c. In practice, the stanza can be either a tercet and two couplets (a-b-a, b-b, c-c) or a quatrain and a tercet (a-b-a-b, b-c-c). ·······  ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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Sep 30 07, 08:32
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
What a nice tribute for a new friend, Sam.
 I must try this form sometime! I only have one nit and that is with the use of divine/divinely - reapeating one after the other. In such a short poem, I often tell poets to try and find other words to use so as not to repeat. I offer up a few alternates to ponder: sublimely, ideally, prettily or splendidly. Her feminine mystique I find divine Divinely found more precious now than gold Enjoyed! ~Cleo 
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner          |
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Sep 30 07, 08:57
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Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
Morning Lori;
You are exactly correct. We do need to use fresher words... especially in such a short format but what I actually wanted to do was play off BOTH words in L3 Her feminine mystique I find divine Divinely found , more precious now than gold Thanks so much for the suggestions. I'll try them. Mostly what I was going for throughout is my sincere appreciation of Pami's warmth and kindness. blessings sam ······· ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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 Oct 2 07, 01:57
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 Assyrian Posts: 181 Joined: 13-September 07 From: Conway, Arkansas Member No.: 468 Real Name: Pamela Writer of: Poetry Referred By:self |
Oh Sam!
Thank you my dear friend! What a wonderful and uplifting surprise to see this here to greet me. I love it! Simply love it and as you did, so I now do...may I please print out a copy to put in my special treasures? I've never heard of Rime Royal and as I'm just now beginning to try to learn pentameter I will have to try out this lovely form. Thank you for typing out the instructions for me. I also teach poetry as I learn it on my site to those who are interested, would it be okay to use this as an example? You are very sweet and kind and I'm so glad we've met! Hugs and smiles, Pami  
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Oct 2 07, 05:09
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Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
Morning Pami;
I'm glad you like the poem. It is yours. I'm honored that you would use it on your site, but I would ask that you first research the form. For it to be a really good example, the meter should follow the same guidelines as the English Sonnet... and I have great difficulty with stressed and unstressed syllables. Please don't start your membership off with a BAD example. There are wonderful examples to introduce them to the form. I like using it occasionally because you are not limited to the number of stanzas. I do tend to write long poems (Have you read Morgun the Troll? It's not rime royal... just looooooooooong!) blessings sam ······· ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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Oct 2 07, 09:15
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
ahhh I enjoyed this one...
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Oct 2 07, 12:44
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Assyrian Posts: 181 Joined: 13-September 07 From: Conway, Arkansas Member No.: 468 Real Name: Pamela Writer of: Poetry Referred By:self |
Sam dear,
I don't even have hardly a clue as to stressed and unstressed syllables, and our members are dabblers as am I. I have so much to learn but feel this is the site that will help teach me. I don't know if I will ever write really great poetry as I have seen here. I've always been content with my work up to now but now I want to stretch my talent as far as it will go. Do you know any good reference material I could look up on the internet? I am sorry to say I've only read the poems I've been able to find. I will have to go back to the date you joined and search out your other gems. Several poems I've found have been deleted. Have a wonderful and refreshing day Sam! Love, Pami 
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Oct 2 07, 12:52
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
Lady Poet, you should be proud! What do you think Sam? - Say it again Sam!?
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Oct 8 07, 07:41
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Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
Dear Lady Poet;
I usually just type in 'poetry forms' and go from there. If I am looking for a particular form (as in your 'cameo' I start with that. As for stressed and unstressed, they go hand in hand with iambic pentameter in the English Sonnet and Rime Royale. I can count syllables and lines, it's getting the rhythm right that is difficult for me. Look up iambic pentameter and there will be loads of info on how to write it properly. Hope this helps. Peterpan; I couldn't agree more. Lady Poet has the heart and the talent to become any kind of poetess she wants. I am also impressed by her willingness and desire to learn. Thank you both for your warm and kind observations. sam ······· ······· Values are to integrity as spirit to spirituality ... the one is needed that the other is sustained ~ Sam
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Oct 8 07, 07:47
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
My pleasure Sam!
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