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Larry
post Feb 8 10, 00:50
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YEAH!!!

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post Feb 8 10, 18:01
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Great game, Larry! cheer.gif I was thrilled and even Barry was like "WHO DAT"...

Yeah for you - be back later...


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post Feb 11 10, 15:43
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Hello All,

Yet another answer to the "first & last" word challenge.

The Last Warrior

Two swords of tempered steel and iron hard wood
and none were left, adept to wield them both
and fend the enemy from where they stood
and guard the keep. I doubt if any could.
To slice invaders like foul undergrowth,

then cast off cloven bodies plighted fair,
and wrest a victory. Will all here claim
because no chain mail cloak is theirs to wear,
though open armory is replete there.
Had I, with stricken body, felt the same

and then accede to fallen foe who lay
in bloody pools of gore, now turning black!
Oh feign not death for it has come today.
Yet, hearken me; for there is still a way
I may induce ye faint of heart. Come back

I plead, and hear the cowards final sigh.
Somewhere beats hero’s heart but it is hence.
Two swords were offered for defense and I--
I, dying, wished for brave men standing by
and prayed some would avenge death’s difference.

Larry


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post Feb 12 10, 08:57
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This is AWESOME, Larry! Might you post it for critique? writersblock.gif Read.gif

Would you mind if I followed your 'theme' in this and tried my own response to it?

Enjoyed the read! claps.gif
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post Feb 12 10, 11:02
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Hi Lori,

Thank you very much for your compliment. I guess I could post it for critique but it would be difficult to change it very much due to the dual parameters of using both the first and the last words from RF.

Please do continue with this theme if you care to. I know how much you enjoy and have seen a lot you have already written in that genre. That you would honor my little line of thought is, in itself, pleasurable to me.

Larry


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post Feb 13 10, 08:09
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Hi Larry, aragorn.gif

QUOTE
I guess I could post it for critique but it would be difficult to change it very much due to the dual parameters of using both the first and the last words from RF.
Ah - but here's the BEAUTY of these challenges (in Karnak, Pandora & Acropolis), should you decide to repost the response in a forum for crit, you are no longer bound by the parameters set out in each challenge (unless you want to be). The idea behind the challenges is to stir the muse and get you writing again. Once you've responded with the set parameters, should you decide to post the resulting poem/short story etc. for critiques, you are then able to "toss" the parameters out the window and re-design/revise your response when you re-post in the crit areas. I often do this! The challenge creates the setting and characters for me - then I can take them further in a way I would rather do so that fits my own writing style and comfort zone. Couch.gif

Great! I have much to do today, but when I can log in and spend some time with my muse, I will give this a go. Who knows, maybe I'll continue your story? Read.gif I DO love this genre. arwen.gif

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~Lori Pharoah.gif


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Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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post Mar 5 14, 10:23
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NOT THE SLIGHTEST MARK

Shall we have new bed of metal ? Wood ?
If only we could chose to have both !
For many a year the old one stood
and oh how I wish that I still could
cavort inspired, in your undergrowth.

Many a year you were passing fair
so I’m proud to say I staked my claim;
for such a long time my ring you’d wear,
and gave me fine children, twelve, all there -
unique characters, no two the same.

Consumed, then exhausted we would lay
as dim daylight faded into black,
and we’d sleep right through to the next day.
To work I would wend my cheery way
dreaming of you, then hurrying back.

I think of you often, with a sigh
as I trudge towards departing hence.
My time on Earth ? Reassured am I
to have made small mark as I slip by -
perhaps not the slightest difference !

(Challenge end words : wood both stood could undergrowth fair claim
wear there same lay black day way back sigh hence I by difference)


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post Mar 11 14, 18:32
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Very well done, Alan... though it seems a very sad commentary on your view of your impact. I'm quite sure that's not a reality!!

By the way, your use of "lay" would be "lie" there, so you might say "Consumed, our exhausted bodies lay..."

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post Mar 11 14, 19:05
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A Brain Mistaken ?

Perhaps my brain is made of wood
or gravel, maybe even both.
To find this out I've often stood
upon my head whene'er I could
where I've found softer undergrowth.

My leaking sawdust isn't fair,
and missing stones is oft the claim
of friends; Rock-Head 's the name I wear.
I feel so low when they are there;
when I'm alone I feel the same.

Last week, each mourn I simply lay
and wallowed in the sooty black
that smoldered in my head all day.
At length I saw this ain't the way
to go, so now I'm creeping back.

Today I woke up with a sigh
of joy, I think, and hope from hence
to give my brain a break, so I
can let it do its thinking by
what's there, and make a difference.

© MLee Dickens'son 2014



Challenge was to use the final words of each line from this Frost poem:

The Road Not Taken
by Robert Frost, 1920

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveler, long I stood
And looked down one as far as I could
To where it bent in the undergrowth;

Then took the other, as just as fair,
And having perhaps the better claim,
Because it was grassy and wanted wear;
Though as for that the passing there
Had worn them really about the same,

And both that morning equally lay
In leaves no step had trodden black.
Oh, I kept the first for another day!
Yet knowing how way leads on to way,
I doubted if I should ever come back.

I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I—
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference.


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post Apr 7 14, 23:08
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Woodie

I once possessed a car of steel and wood.
The engineering guys had used them both
because of a design they understood
might lead to sales and its esthetics could
chase competition into undergrowth.

At first, their sales were middling to fair
and it did what the advertisers claim
but only people who lived in swimwear
would buy them now. Their surfboards carried there
upon the roof; it never was the same

as that nice car where families might lay
their luggage for a trip... Mine was jet black
and yes, I used it every single day
to drive out to the beach. The only way
to tote my boards to surf and bring them back

without a scratch. Sometimes I sit and sigh
while thinking back to sunny places hence;
remembering good times. I’m glad that I
released that dream for cold hard cash, thereby
I bought a home. It made a difference!


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post Apr 15 14, 07:13
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Hahahaha! Great response Larry! laugh.gif


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post Apr 15 14, 23:02
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Hi Lori,

Thanks for the read and the chuckles.

None of the above was true about Woodie ownership or surfing but I was exposed to all that when I lived in California.

Larry


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post Apr 16 14, 07:57
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Hello Larry. magictongue.png

I spy with my little eye cyclops.gif that YOU are having a birthday today! birthday.gif

Happy Birthday! Balloons.gif PartyFavor.gif

May you wish on a star.... or two...

and all your dreams come true!
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May you receive the coolest present.gif with lots of lovie.gif, yummy sweetness mm.gif hersheyskiss.gif mm.gif, some birthday.gif (chocolate for me) chef.gif, a few laughs clown.gif and a whole lot of GroupHug.gif as you celebrate you!

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Happiest of Birthdays to you (and a good year you'll have)!


~Lori kiss.gif


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post Apr 21 14, 23:09
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Hi Lori,

Thank you! I had a wonderful birthday.

Now, you try another one of these!!!!!

Larry


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DECISIONS, DECISIONS

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both,
I stopped ....

Alan


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... and here I am waiting behind you!!


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... and I was behind you but decided not to wait.

Thought I'd try to emulate Frost's metrics with this one instead of falling back on IP.


Walking Sticks

I’m on my porch where I whittle wood,
some Oak and Pine; I like to carve both.
The limbs are all that’s left where they stood
trying to reach the sky if they could
but now there’s nothing left but undergrowth.

I’m not an expert carver but fair
and some small expertise I can claim
because of practice. Now I always wear
a leather apron down to there…
once scarred, I’d like to keep it the same.

First, I check how the knots and grains lay
then shave away the brown and black
bark. Perhaps I’ll get a small lathe some day
but meanwhile, I’ll just do it my way.
My grandpa showed me how to carve way back

when he was still around. With a sigh,
I often recall what he taught, hence
the character of each stick that I
complete is like it was done by
his hands, not mine. That’s the difference.


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post Aug 17 14, 02:41
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Sticks and stoned can break my bones
but words can never beat me

Larry's motto.

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post Aug 17 14, 08:37
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Hi Alan,

A word is but a tool and we must find the nut on which it fits.

Thanks for the read and the visit.

Larry


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Pennant for Trebor Tsorf


Perhaps it’s just indifference
and not the fact they don’t come by
to post or crit or read so I
continue on my way. From hence
no tears will fall; a patient sigh

may find escape. I’d bring them back
with open arms or find a way
to fill these halls again one day.
Most forums are cobwebbed and black
with no one there to pen a lay

and everything remains the same.
I guess I could go here and there
to post a piece but it would wear
upon my nerves and I might claim
it’s good but it would just be fair.

I’ll hide in Karnak’s undergrowth
and hope for some small change; it could
bring back a few who understood
to raise the dead… I’ll carry both
a torch and cross made out of wood.


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When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
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