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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ Monthly Challenges -> Pandora's Box _ A Library Collection.

Posted by: Rhymer Nov 18 16, 11:53

Throughout The Ages of Gaia, many changes made,
have intrigued and mystified the sober and staid,
so this will be A Tangled Tale I now weave,
of Sylvie and Bruno who, would you believe,
were Listening to The Music of the Spheres,
when The Canterville Ghost too, so one hears,
was accompanied by The Young King,
just as The English Patient, joined in to sing.
Next The Fisherman and his Soul-ful dirge,
brought The Selfish Giant, to the very verge
of tears! This on a Small Island, where heíd overheard
the God of Small Things, tell a passing bird,
that the Rape of The Fair Country, where
Angelís Ashes were being strewn, here and there,
had caused The Blood of Flowers to flow.
Surely this will be a heart breaking Tale of woe!

Rhymer. November 18th, 2016.
(Better late than never? Maybe? Lol!)

Book Titles as used:
The Ages of Gaia, A Tangled Tale, Sylvie and Bruno, The Music of the Spheres
The Canterville Ghost, The Young King, The English Patient,The Fisherman and his Soul,
The Selfish Giant, Small Island, The God of Small Things, Rape of the Fair Country,
Angela's Ashes, The Blood of Flowers.

Posted by: Psyche Nov 22 16, 17:57

Hi Rhymer! JackBox.gif

Yes, better late than never... LOL. Trouble is, I hadn't visited this particular forum for ages, so I didn't notice your highly entertaining answer to the challenge.

Never mind now! I think your use of the book titles is fantastic. You appear to have used all of them. I've counted 14 titles in your poem!

Besides, you've used lovely end-rhymes throughout. A great accomplishment. I like the humor in this poem. Some of the titles have indeed been taken from Lewis Carroll, but then most of the others are from serious authors or novelists.

Wow, as I revise them, some of the novels are downright gloomy, difficult to digest. So your participation is highly welcome, I've read it over several times and had a good laugh! biggrin.gif
I do hope you come around more often. Acropolis is the challenge forum most visited and/or used. And then you have Herme's for rhyming verse. It would be fantastic if you were to move this one over to Herme's, where you're far more likely to get comments or critiques.
Bring 'em on, Rhymer!
Best, Syl butterfly.gif


Posted by: Rhymer Nov 24 16, 07:32

Thanks for your comment Psyche, it is much appreciated. I note your suggestion but quite frankly, critiquing of poetry, and especially of mine, is not high on my list of 'wants'. I have in the many years of my poetic endeavours, been embroiled with too many 'self styled, and opinionated' readers - mainly of an age far removed from mine - who are too bigoted to indulge in friendly discussion, and who, possessing that "know-it-all" attitude, cause more trouble and chaos than any poetry site needs or deserves!

Now I am not for one moment suggesting this is the case here in MM, but having been well 'versed' - terrible pun, in poetry in the - shall we say - earlier/adolescent days of the 20th Century, I, although very much a traditionalist that tries to emulate the styles of Shakespeare, Hardy and their like, I am neither hide bound by the 'official' rules nor am I a 'purist'. furthermore, never let it be said, that I am so dogmatic in my views as to force them on another poet! I can and do accept any poet's right and freedom to express their views, in any manner they wish!

For now, and Iím truly sad to see MM so little visited of late, as I find time to browse back through the vaults and attempt to catch up on previous, intriguing Challenges - always like to see what my little grey cells - aging ones - can come up with! I have posted another effort to a previous Challenge in/on the Acropolis section. Winter has arrived and so my gardening days have been brought to an abrupt halt, which hopefully, will allow me to search out other possibilities!

My sincere thanks for your kind enthusiasm, and may you not think too harshly on an older Dorset (UK) Poet who finds writing poetry a wonderful way to relax! Next to his gardening that always comes first, that is. Ciao Denis aka Rhymer.

Posted by: Larry Nov 25 16, 11:22

Hi Dennis,

Glad you picked up on an older challenge. It's nice to see others take up the gauntlet. I've no critique, as it were, but have one suggestion. Don't capitalize the "Book Titles". It reads much better with normal typing and if someone wants to search out the titles used, they have your references at the bottom of your poem.

Very pleased you made an effort (and a good one) to use end-rhymes. I enjoyed the story very much.

Larry


p.s. Happy Belated Birthday

Posted by: Psyche Nov 29 16, 23:06


Hi Denis, it's me again, curious to see whether you've posted elsewhere.

There's always Plato's Pearls of Wisdom, where authors do not receive critiques or suggestions. It's the place to show your poems, not a work-shopping forum.

And yes, I've been in websites full of obnoxious wannabe poets. But sometimes a suggestion is useful, so I tweak my poem accordingly. I don't even bother to answer the rude ones... LOL. My own poetry is more of a way to express my thoughts, nothing exceptional. It does me good to concentrate on my work, especially in these alarming times.

Larry is the one to appeal for help with sonnets, villanelles, etc. He's enormously appreciated.

Do come around again,
best, Sylvia butterfly.gif


Posted by: Rhymer Dec 5 16, 10:12

QUOTE (Psyche @ Nov 29 16, 23:06 ) *

Hi Denis, it's me again, curious to see whether you've posted elsewhere.

There's always Plato's Pearls of Wisdom, where authors do not receive critiques or suggestions. It's the place to show your poems, not a work-shopping forum.

And yes, I've been in websites full of obnoxious wannabe poets. But sometimes a suggestion is useful, so I tweak my poem accordingly. I don't even bother to answer the rude ones... LOL. My own poetry is more of a way to express my thoughts, nothing exceptional. It does me good to concentrate on my work, especially in these alarming times.

Larry is the one to appeal for help with sonnets, villanelles, etc. He's enormously appreciated.

Do come around again,
best, Sylvia butterfly.gif



Posted by: Rhymer Dec 5 16, 10:43

Hi Sylvia and Larry.

Firstly it would seem my server has been giving me a tough time of late, and all my passwords, user names and etcetera's, were thrown to the winds! Catch one if you can and send it back to me, as I'm truly annoyed at their cavalier attitude of late. Bad enough when one's sight is flawed but to find all my long used 'needs' have been whisked away into never, never land, and no indication of why, has been given me, and adds the ultimate frustration, to what is always a tricky time at best!!

Thank you both most sincerely, for your comments, and I note your suggestion Larry. Point taken, although for me, it is both convenient and natural for me to do it in this manner, as it's done that way in the first place, as I use WordPerfect to compose all my poetry, essays and comments before posting to/on my chosen site. It allows me to follow my chain of thought far better. However, I will try (must remember) to 'de-capitalise' before posting in future.

This is due in part to being a creature of habit inasmuch, as I and my classmates, were always taught this way in the grammar school I attended as a lad. My English Teacher was one who would not compromise and had strict rules he enforced - by various means - to ensure we got 'his' message and adhered to same! Lol! Not one to be denied! Hard to break a lifetime's habit Larry, but I'll try! Lol!

I am just a little disappointed that the membership of MM seems to have deserted en masse of late! Admittedly, I have not helped at all, but I doubt everyone has been taken ill? Monitors, moderators and their ilk, are an especial breed, and I admire the work they do - unfortunately, a necessity in this modern age - and I do not envy them their difficult task. With so much of my time taken up with my large - two acre garden - I doubt I would be of much help even if I volunteered and was accepted!

I think all due credit should be given you Sylvia/ Psyche, for despite your own personal limitations - be they your work or personal, to carry out your duties as you do, is time consuming, and certainly calls for a diplomatic approach when dealing with a variety of cultures and educational standards! A trait I know is an essential and one I too had to implement when dealing with the public, as indeed I did for over 30 years! Biting one's tongue at times, can be a painful experience, but most necessary when one prefers a quiet life!

Enough from me this time. We have received an overnight snowfall - 5 plus inches - that requires me to use my shovelling prowess! One strange though it may seem, that I enjoy! It keeps me fit and although a task that takes me some five to six hours to complete, always leaves me with the satisfaction of knowing I can still undertake such work. A very useful aid in my physical recovery process too! (Does nothing for my mental recovery! Lol!) Yes I do have a snow-blower but seldom use it unless we have more than eight inches of snow in one fall!

For this time. My regards and again, thank you both for the trouble you take to read and comment. Ciao for now have a great day. Rhymer aka Denis.


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