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Lanturne

The lanturne (or lanterne) is a five-line light verse evidently derived from Haiku and shaped like a Japanese lantern (hence the name) with a syllabic pattern of 1 2 3 4 1 syllables. Sometimes described as a half-cinquain there seems to be no particular requirement for subject matter, though the original intention may have been a statement of nature.

Generally, each line is a self-contained statement, such that the poem is not merely a sentence arbitrarily divided into syllables. Some suggest that the form should begin with a noun, with line 2 giving an action or description of the noun and lines 3 & 4 each giving a further description, and the 5th line offering another word for the noun, though not necessarily a synonym or even a noun. The form may or may not have a title, but it can be an integral part as the ‘sixth line’ of the poem.

snow
adrift
covering
ice where it may
fall


© MLee Dickens'son 25 Feb 2005

nose
sensing
what eye can’t
seeks to acquire
skill


© MLee Dickens'son 22 Feb 2005

naught
I ’ d r e a d
echoed sense
to comprehend
aught


© MLee Dickens'son 27 Feb 2005

food for thought

sleep
eschews
leaves quickly
with morning's break
fast


© MLee Dickens'son 24 March 2005


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- JustDaniel   Lanturne   Oct 20 06, 08:04
- - JustDaniel   knight's wet rain falling empties clouds leav...   Oct 20 06, 08:14
- - AMETHYST   ... You have tempted me to try one on for size...   Oct 21 06, 14:57
|- - JustDaniel   What is there to improve, Liz? Liz mentor crit...   Oct 22 06, 10:38
- - Cleo_Serapis   This looks like a lot of FUN Daniel. All the exa...   Oct 22 06, 12:02
- - AMETHYST   Thank you for that nice compliment Daniel. I miss ...   Oct 22 06, 17:27
|- - Cleo_Serapis   QUOTE (AMETHYST @ Oct 22 06, 18:27 ) Hi L...   Oct 22 06, 17:47
|- - JustDaniel   Addiction has begun! leaves flipping turn y...   Oct 22 06, 18:31
|- - JustDaniel   Nefertiti Miz who is creative not miscreant ...   Oct 24 06, 15:14
- - Cathy   Scares are near, so beware this Hallowed Eve. Boo...   Oct 30 06, 10:11
- - Cleo_Serapis   Buds flourish blanketing stems with dappled b...   Jun 17 07, 11:49
|- - JustDaniel   O l bright lanturnes will soon light Elizabeth...   Jul 1 07, 17:39
- - AMETHYST   Ah ... Yes, I did try one on for size! Thank y...   Jul 1 07, 19:05
|- - JustDaniel   You're welcome. I'd noted that you were a...   Jul 1 07, 19:21
- - Cleo_Serapis   Bulbs blossom garnishing nature’s palette Spring   May 23 08, 09:41
- - AMETHYST   Hey Lori, This is very vivid. I liked how L1/L5 ...   Jun 11 08, 19:12
- - Cleo_Serapis   Thanks Liz - I've posted this one for crits ov...   Jun 12 08, 05:32
- - JustDaniel   lips provide impression poet needs back talk ...   Sep 6 09, 15:58
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- - Larry   Mind and heart understand what lips never say.   Apr 10 12, 13:56
- - Alan   TRUTH say what's dared/ what is true/ gotten ...   Apr 10 12, 14:01
|- - JustDaniel   Just a reminder, from the opening page of this thr...   Apr 10 12, 14:14
- - Alan   choked strong words emotions hung out to dry iced ...   Apr 16 12, 16:29
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- - Larry   sleep freshens relaxes eases the mind rests   Apr 24 12, 17:10
- - Alan   rests for cues the entry gladiators pause Alan   Apr 24 12, 17:49
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- - Alan   fly virgin great feeling quite orgasmic high Alan   Apr 25 12, 04:07
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- - JustDaniel   clam clamps down on fingers interposing shell   Apr 25 12, 10:49
- - Alan   deleted   Apr 25 12, 16:36
- - JustDaniel   like come on friend Alan; honor the form please?   Apr 26 12, 04:40
- - Larry   pleas in form that lanturnes material eyes   Apr 26 12, 09:23
- - JustDaniel   ayes have it when they move to end it all now   Apr 26 12, 12:29
- - Larry   know the ends justify demeans in some form   Apr 26 12, 13:12
- - Alan   form idea refinement final collapse smash Alan   Apr 27 12, 00:31
- - JustDaniel   smash the form's syllables by discounting them   Apr 27 12, 08:22
- - Larry   them and us mispronounce certain words a lot   Apr 27 12, 08:56
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- - Larry   back assault mined a lot shake her foolish act   Apr 27 12, 16:30
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- - Larry   some- where's one syllable that's also sma...   Apr 30 12, 00:23
- - Alan   in vino veritas but in water truth Alan   Apr 30 12, 02:42
- - JustDaniel   truth has one syllable a powerful one   Apr 30 12, 09:14
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