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 Jan 23 09, 07:22
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr  |
MINGO PARK
In Mingo Park, pastoral scenes unfold, quaint, charming, never lonely or cold; residents greet you with a warm hello, strolling couples reflect a tender glow beneath autumn’s canopy of red and gold. Sturdy benches are their stronghold, gossip’s shared, tomorrow is foretold, time’s infinite, the pace of life is slow in Mingo Park. Dreams evolve, hardly ever put on hold, starry-eyed pursuits are mirthfully bold. Amidst wildflowers, lover’s desires grow under the stars on blankets lined in a row. Precious memories are never to be sold in Mingo Park. ·······  ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Jan 23 09, 11:10
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John, I liked the image this protraits, who knew there were so many ryhmes for the long 'O' sound...lol. Not knowing the rules for a Rondeau I am not sure about the 'in Mingo Park' ending of the second and third stanzas. I know that it threw my smoothly reading pace off, and jarred a little. Just my take.
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Jan 23 09, 12:09
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Steve,
Thanks for your comments. It may not be smooth, but I tried to follow the formula. Every town has a "Mingo Park". This particular park is located in the town of Delaware in the State of Ohio. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Jan 23 09, 18:26
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Congrats on taking on the rondeau form JLY. I have a few to my credit, but went back to look at the rules which I had forgotten. Yours conforms to that form.
There are a number of versions, all with some sort of repetition, which is indicative of the French forms (for Steve). Yes, there's a park like that probably everywhere. One hears the news reports occasionally of things that happen that are not too neighborly, such as killings and beatings. Mostly, they are still peaceful places to visit. Merlin ······· ······· |
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Jan 26 09, 12:13
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Merlin,
Thanks. I am always uneasy about attempting new forms, never knowing if I can come up with something that will measure up. Your support is helpful and I will take some more chances and continue to try new things. I have been in a rut and I need to try new things and hopefully I will be able to create some things that might please both me and the reader. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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