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Aug 22 07, 04:20
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Etheree [eh-thuh-ray] consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. It is like an inverted nonet with an extra line.
Etheree may also be reversed (inverted) and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. When writing multiple stanzas, the pattern of the original (whether standard or inverted) generally continues in the subsequent stanzas.
Here are two of mine:
Love ethere it is, or...
plunge yourself in… to love bottomlessly and you’ll discover that it is not baseless though somewhat ethereal when action's truly the real thing... it carries more weight than you can bear; while there may seem no rhyme, there is reason © MLee Dickens'son 23 Feb 2004 Revised 16 July 2007
Free Love
Can someone demonstrate that he has love apart from actions? He'll not ask one thing in return for what he gives but good for the one receiving though the recipient may hate him all through the process of being given.
© MLee Dickens'son 21 Aug 2007
This post has been edited by JustDaniel: Jan 12 19, 21:53
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Aug 22 07, 05:18
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Thanks Daniel, I could of sworn we'd posted this form before, but alas, it wasn't ehre - so thanks again! Are there any rhyming requirements or is it based soley on the syllables/lines? Both poems are a very powerful example of the form - thanks again! ~Cleo
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Aug 22 07, 07:26
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Hi Daniel~
Thank you again for the poetry education. I rely on you!
Extremely interesting?
PP
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Aug 22 07, 08:38
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Thank you, Lori and Bev! Yes, I thought that this form had been posted too, as I was going to refer to it for one of the members who asked about it... but after searching over the three pages three times (You know how I can overlook things with my dyslexia, so I have to do things multiple times!), I couldn't find it either and just took the chance that it really wasn't there. I'm surprised, but I didn't want this form to go unused here. Like the nonet (Is that posted here?) it is purely syllabic, and there are no other requirements... except, of course, to not merely chop narrative or prose up into arbitrary chunks. I personally like to have each line share a complete thought or portions of a thought. I also personally work at line length if possible to present a pleasing picture. Lightly, Daniel
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May 2 12, 12:11
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Prayer for Seasons of Peace
Across two vast seas once separating widely divergent cultures and lands segregated in sovereign realms, we’d subjugate for ourselves dim knowledge of an orb spinning east to west. May all the north now embrace… let peace spring,
fall
southward till trees blaze loud freedom hues though skies be ashen and ill winds whip briskly … yet cool old blood-spirits to take solace in broken ground till covered anew with gentler snow spreading freely to reflect God’s glory
© MLee Dickens'son 20 March 2004
welcoming the first day of spring / fall in two hemispheres
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re this form, Ethere; Where is it from? Did you invent it? I've seen the name before and thought it was a perfume. It's even an album's title by an Italian band - Letargica but, according to the rules of this form I won't leave you hanging with a "ca" so I will add the inversion. Expressing oneself this way takes a lot of thinking about what is said and each word used to convey meaning best.
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Feb 23 13, 12:42
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there lingereth a ray
peer a m i d poetry’s formal array; you’ll find Ethere compiling wisps of tears to slip down its soft’ning cheeks and reflect cool mourn’s warming sun ‘til they collect themselves… to shimmer while their soul swims through your lost memories
© MLee Dickens'son
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Feb 24 13, 14:48
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New Memories
mixed with the memories soon to be lost are reminders of what might have been were knowledge to feed discretion on our path from womb to grave but those are mere regrets, with little substance which fade away when a smile brightens eyes, dim with age, my young son and granddaughter race in the back yard trailing squeals of laughter which entice the dog to join in the game of tag played in my youth and no thought of tomorrow encroached on that moment when memories were made
Daniel, I hope this meets with your approval in both form and content.
Larry
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Feb 24 13, 19:24
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I heartily applaud you on both fronts, my dear friend! Stirring and deLightful!
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Feb 25 13, 15:58
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Daniel,
Thank you, kind sir. Perhaps I will try a few more.
Larry
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Feb 27 13, 13:48
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Jacob's Son
Gold-
wonder
kill-shot me
a world away;
I can hear the wind
thru the keyhole, as of
the last policeman's whistle.
Why did I forsake my homestead
for but the prospect of shine shine shine?
I'm charred and scruffed like the fallen angel.
Who'd ever find a land more kind than home?
But the shadow of night spills darkness;
I've become but shadow and bone.
The song of Achilles warns
about the long walk back.
Though Dad bid me go
Mom will be there
defending
Jacob's
son.
© MLee Dickens'son 2013 from 15 challenge titles, in order: Gold, Wonder, Kill Shot, A World Away, The Wind Through the Keyhole, The Last Policeman, Shine Shine Shine, Charred & Scruffed, The Fallen Angel, A Land More Kind Than Home, Shadow of Night, Shadow and Bone, The Song of Achilles, The Long Walk, Defending Jacob
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Mar 6 13, 23:51
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Daniel,
This is an absolute gem. You got this from challenge titles? Fantastic job.
Larry
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Mar 7 13, 00:53
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Thanks so very much, Larry. It was a challenge indeed, but seeing them as a puzzle can be very intriguing! framed
book
TITLES
may wander
ev'ry which way
but stitch together
as a distinctive quilt,
a patchwork of emotion
distilled of various authors
who would not expect their ideas
to be laid out and framed on one canvas
© MLee Dickens'son 2013
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Mar 7 13, 18:03
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Titles
cut
and mesh
parts that name
the worlds in them,
unglossed challenge to
rip life from their sanctum;
intriguing tease which can lure
new readers or those who’ve known
grand visions you’ve revealed in the past.
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Mar 12 13, 17:04
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The Stealth of Leisure
love
leisure
and your soul
morphs with a thief
who now rides tandem;
he'll cause you to wander
away from well-chosen steps
and compel you to charge items
laughing at you from those online sites
until they foreclose on your home mortgage
© MLee Dickens'son 2013 from Challenge words, in order: love, leisure, soul, morph, tandem, wander, step, compel, charge, home
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Mar 15 13, 15:16
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porous pockets
stall
and do
less as you
e-shop. Bargains,
selling through E-bay,
may not be the best plan
and are frequently third rate
knock-offs. An overpriced surfeit
extensively larger than your brains.
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Dec 15 18, 14:36
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brain cannot acrostic everything as you like to do; I'll not even attempt to align and malign words to impress you -- as though I could -- and please don't feel that you are required to throw this friend down while splaying yours out
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Dec 17 18, 16:07
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operation’s successful
ours plods thru each critic; riles the skeptic as to who’s the one to subvert the process instead of seeing success opens ways to traverse the cliff nonchalantly until they watch you sliding easily down the long steep hill
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Dec 22 18, 21:10
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HIGH ABOVE LOFTY AIMS
hill is to get me off; hot fear of height arched up there lofty because I'm simply a over-achieving boob. I verify it's true that I am even numbered among unevens
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Dec 24 18, 23:29
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eject that epicurean
Eve jacked up Eden’s lei, causing epic trials for me and you through consuming fruit for hedonism from a snake and was banned from the area that may have been a bit of heaven
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