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> White Plaster, In memory of my beloved Dad~October 2, 2000
Aphrodite
post Oct 2 09, 07:50
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You lie there, solid and firm,
as onlookers gawk and comment
on how good you turned out.

They did such a good job, they whisper,
like white plaster thrown on hard walls,
you just take it.

How you love to hold hands, but not your own,
the Rosary Beads d r a p e loosely cross
spindly fingers, like drops from tears cried dry.

In the bed you made, you lie cold,
a hard box unlike the feathery soft
mattress you once fell into.

Consumed by a lifelong toxic cloud,
sucking in, you lie ravaged and still.

Oh, but for just one more breath of clean air.


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post Oct 6 09, 09:03
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Lindi,

This is so poignant on many levels. I'm soooo sorry that "the smoking life" consumed your father - but this is a spot-on expression of the coffin, i.e. bed he made - and the wish to have just one more breath of 'clean air'.

This is one to make one think!!!

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post Oct 8 09, 07:01
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Oct 6 09, 14:03 ) *
Lindi,

This is so poignant on many levels. I'm soooo sorry that "the smoking life" consumed your father - but this is a spot-on expression of the coffin, i.e. bed he made - and the wish to have just one more breath of 'clean air'.

This is one to make one think!!!

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Hi Lori,

It is nice to be back! I have many poems about my Dad and how much I love and miss him. This one expresses my sadness and anger, that because of his addiction to cigarettes, I was robbed precious time with him.

I appreciate your comments very much!

Happy Autumn. pumpkin.gif


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post Oct 8 09, 07:07
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Happy Autumn to you too Lindi! pumpkin.gif

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post Oct 9 09, 09:37
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Thanks, Lori!


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post Nov 4 09, 00:50
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Hello Aphro,

Addictions, no matter which one, are difficult creatures.
I have friends and acquaintances who succumbed to alcohol, and accepting that takes a bit of doing sometimes.

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post Nov 26 09, 19:49
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QUOTE (Merlin @ Nov 4 09, 06:50 ) *
Hello Aphro,

Addictions, no matter which one, are difficult creatures.
I have friends and acquaintances who succumbed to alcohol, and accepting that takes a bit of doing sometimes.

Best

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Hi Merlin,

Thanks for commenting on my poem. It is very hard to watch someone you love fade away.
I am sorry for your experience with this.

Happy holidays to you.

Lindi


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