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Liz; Overjoyed at your enthusaiam and encouragement. This is the only thing I could find from work. Don't have access to my files. This poem needs work and I do plan to revisit it, just haven't had time as I'm now into 'building' mountain dulcimers. Anywho ... here's this. Faith Seasoned~Pentasam
Who quoth the lie O’ darken’d sky of grey What promise of tomorrow doth prevail When cold is turned against sun’s palest ray Why bitten is each breath I may inhale How shall my hope see through thy dismal veil
But breaking new unto the south and east A whisper born of wisdom age to age Scoff at my cry and track the fleeing beast And cast a warmth to calm thy winter rage That vernal sings the psalm from springtime’s page
First warblers catch the note and spread the word Ostara’s equal night hath bid them so On morning light the message must be heard Pubescent seed within the womb must know And once again my faith through grace must grow |
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Forum: Poetry Education -> Karnak Crossing
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Posted on: Jun 29 10, 01:00 |
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QUOTE (Sekhmet @ Jun 26 10, 09:33 ) ![*](style_images/antique/post_snapback.gif) Hello Sam - I found this in the Oxford English Dictionary - I remember this word being in use in English poetry when I was a child - " ... was ever wont to wander." wont
/wont/
• adjective archaic or literary accustomed.
• noun (one’s wont) formal or humorous one’s customary behaviour.
• verb (3rd sing. present wonts or wont; past and past part. wont or wonted) archaic make or become accustomed.
— ORIGIN Old English.
M'k ... by these accounts I'm going to give 'wont' a nod and let it stay. Much like you said, sometimes I'll read a word or passage and just by its novel placement, it will stick in my head and I'll pull it out at some point in time. I do NOT research every idiom that pops up while writing. I probably should. Thanks so much for the solid, printed reference you've given. sam |
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Forum: Poetry Education -> Karnak Crossing
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Posted on: Jun 2 10, 06:16 |
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QUOTE (jgdittier @ May 31 10, 11:11 ) ![*](style_images/antique/post_snapback.gif) Dear Lori and staff, Tho I've been dry as the Sahara for several months now, perhaps your proposed reforms will end the drought. I wandered away from MM because of an aspect of its strong commitment to crits. My problem was/is that I consider myself a light verser. As a light verser, both crits written by others and my crits for others mostly missed the mark. I found no happy place to post where verse such as mine would be treated as LIGHT VERSE. In critting others' POETRY, my intolerance for the many new no-nos that I now believe are inflicted on modern R&M POETRY would make my comments of little value. I've found similar problems everywhere I've landed and believe that why the dry spell. I'm much in favor of your reform. Maybe now my muses will return. Ditto too for those who have developed their art fully and will thus be relieved of the need to read crits from those less advanced. Cheers, jgdittier Ron I've had a suspicion that this may be the case with many. I write pretty mild or generic stuff too. I'm very happy to find that I'm not alone in my apprehension of giving full blown crits when ... 1. I don't really feel qualified and 2. Often there is not enough substance to warrant a critique. I'd prefer to be supportive and encouraging. I hope MM will take these suggestions as meant ... with the warmest of intent and respect for a fine board and fine staff. Sam |
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Forum: Nero's News
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Posted on: Apr 29 10, 03:36 |
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Forum: Poetry Education -> Karnak Crossing
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Posted on: Apr 25 10, 04:00 |
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New poetry form ??? Pentesam~Any number of five line stanzas in iambic pentameter, rhyme pattern ababb. Example: (First one ever). Improperly Pok't Woulds't poking come more noble in the dark Where not a prying eye is wont to see Or pok't in darkness might he miss the mark And leave thee with abrasions on thy knee Time spent, methinks, in practice is the key |
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Forum: Poetry Education -> Karnak Crossing
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Posted on: Apr 16 10, 14:40 |
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Ok, I'm back. It is just a little more wordy. It works fine though. I do worry sometimes that when attempting to write in an archaic tone, that sometimes a little more is too much. Here's the suggestion you made, I just 'felt' as though the 'the' was needed as well. What do you think? Oh and thanks for the consideration :) Visions inTwilight~Revisited
In anticipation I search the twilight as the horizon dims and you come to me in purples
once the sun has slipped its golden sabers into that sheath which nighttime holds I await you …
your step is soft it stirs the lilac and sends me a fragrance my senses awaken, quiver
your vision tempts I need the beauty the sanctity of your bosom
bared wanton breath vaults the clefted shadows of your breasts licking at your neck turned to catch last light curved
inviting
reaching out to my lips
moments pass into violet eyes are blurred but not the touch
virile on velvet, mauveine emotion, sighs fallen from mulberry lips …
colors fade into memories purple ever the last to go your parting sculpture remains in my eyes
I reach out your promise abides you are there for me
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Forum: ARCHIVES -> Poetry for Crit Prior to 2011
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Posted on: Apr 14 10, 11:22 |
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Apr 14 10, 07:13 ) ![*](style_images/antique/post_snapback.gif) ![LOL.gif](http://forumimages.mosaicmusings.net/style_emoticons/default/LOL.gif) ! I would add a beat to the last line - you could do so easily with "Georgie". Fun read! ~C;ep "Read: George hurried home for a nooner When he was eclipsed by a lunar Missing his mark There in the dark Poor Georg ie instead faced a mooner Thanks Lori 'rum |
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Forum: ARCHIVES -> Short Form Poetry -> Shogun...
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QUOTE (Peggy Carpenter Harwood @ Apr 13 10, 16:43 ) ![*](style_images/antique/post_snapback.gif) Hi Sam,
I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon.
Peggy The intent was to rhyme with nooner, nothing more. It's a limerick. 'rum |
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