Another nomination for the August IBPC:
Hi Lori,
I would like to nominate Daniel's poem A Door to Curiosity for IBPC. It can be found by http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=16040. It's an amusing and deftly written piece about long past experiences, with which many may identify.
Cheers,
Syl***
A Door to Curiosity
Walking the halls of his high school last week,
something made his curiosity peak.
Daybreak peeked in from a place where he swore
he'd never noticed a doorway before!
Faintly a song had emerged from the mist
seeping out under the door... which was locked.
Nearly in shock, he looked 'round to enlist
help to gain entrance to where he had knocked.
No one was there, so he battered and kicked
'til he became so worn out, he sat down
right where he was, heaving hard; he was licked....
Suddenly out of the space came a clown
mocking the rube like Uriah the Heep.
Thoroughly humbled, I woke from my sleep.
© MLee Dickens'son 2013
Thank you very much, Sylvia. I gratefully accept your nomination.
It's presently being work-shopped, and I've posted my first Revision of it yesterday. I think in may be in its final stage now, or at least close. I'd appreciate your taking another look.
Others, of course, may visit using the link above provided.
deLighting in the opportunity, Daniel
Hi,
This is a must read war poem that moved me to nominate it for IBPC. It's telling descriptions and visual imagery are fabulous even though the subject is about war. You can read this poem http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=16016.
Enjoyed the read,
~Cleo
Flash in the Pan by Walter Schwimm
In wartime, lights in the night usually signify something bad is about to happen – somewhere!
Breaking the stillness; a bump in the night!
Is that the start of an Eighty-one’s flight?
Payload of chaos to no one knows where
till H.E. and shrapnel light up the air.
Bursting in splendour, bright star in the sky,
Icarus riding a thousand foot high.
Just for a minute she dazzles the eyes
then swinging in circles, gradually dies.
Lazy green fire-flies, starting out slow
floating through darkness – all in a row.
Lazy green fire-flies rapidly change
to green killer-hornets streaking up-range.
Flickers of lightning! (A storm's overdue?)
Katyusha's big daughter, the one-twenty-two
shrieks overhead like a flaming banshee;
the zone near her grounding you’d rather not be.
Lurking in shadow, as patient as Jobe,
mine waits a victim to press on its probe,
renting the soul with a blast out of hell;
a few have survived their story to tell.
Of battle aurora commanding the night,
nothing’s as heinous as one out of sight.
Tiny hot flash of a rifle well aimed
could modestly signal “Your life has been claimed!”
Notes:
“Eighty-one” – 81mm NATO calibre Medium mortar. The Russian version had an 82mm bore.
“Icarus” – Hand launched parachute flare, also known as “thousand foot flare”.
“Katyusha” – Russian nickname of the older 82mm artillery rocket also known as “Stalin’s Organ” .
It was superseded by the powerful 122mm projectile with a range of up to 30 km.
Other references are to; machine gun tracer fire, mines and booby-traps.
Hi Daniel!
My computer has glitches...aaarghhh!!
I'm so glad your poem will be off to IBPC for August.
I wish you the best of luck. I'll peek at your revision, certainly
Cheers,
Syl***
Much Congratulations to Wally!! This poem has just placed third for the August IBPC.
Here are judge Robert Sward's comments about it:
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