The Forest Dweller***, Villanelle/Iambic Options

[Luce]

There’s no one here but me
and here I’ve made my home
amidst the hum of bees.

The cold has turned the leaves
and snow will hug the stones.
There’s no one here but me.

I fish the streams with ease
and harvest seeds from cones
amidst the hum of bees.

A calm has come to be.
It’s deep within my bones
for no one’s here but me.

Let others seek the sea
but I have found my home
amidst the hum of bees.

The rustle of the trees
instills a peace which grows
for no one’s here but me
amidst the hum of bees.

Luce

[Eisa]

I love this one Luce. I hope someone who knows more about this form will call by to comment. It all looks great to me. Each line seems to flow into the next. So many lovely lines, full of nature.


Let others seek the sea
but I have found my home
amidst the hum of bees.

The rustle of the trees
instills a peace which grows (one l in instils)
for no one’s here but me
amidst the hum of bees.

[Luce]

Hi Eisa,

Glad you like this one.

As far as the form is concerned, it's easy enough to follow and probably easier to crit.

I looked up instill and it seems as if you can spell it either way (instill or instil). Here in the States, I've only seen it spelled with two lls - instill.

Luce

[Eisa]

Hi Luce,

It was the spell check on my computer that said instil had one l - thinking about it I think I always spell it with 2. Spell check is always letting me down, LOL!!

Eira