Haiku: new perspectives, some thoughts, lessons, links Options

[laryalee]

I'm adding another link here...
I just came across Richard Wright's work,
and he write mostly in 5-7-5!
A fascinating poet, and his words make one
pause:

http://www.terebess.hu/english/haiku/wright.html


Lary

[Guest_Cathy_*]

Hi Cathy,
ah, I feel something here...
especially this...

winter's breath
upon a red rose

Although it's personifying winter, hmmmm....
(personification, like metaphors, is not
encouraged.)

And to me, "bloody death" is actually describing
what happens in lines 2 and 3?
So a juxtaposition is needed. A change of direction...

one red petal
on the rose --
winter chill

Not a very good example, I'm afraid!
But perhaps it gives you an idea...


Lary

Hi Lary,

Thanks for the help!
Ok... what about

one red petal
curls upon the rose...
winter chill

Cathy

[Guest_Cathy_*]

Hey Lary!

I was reading through some of these and I noticed that a lot of his don't mention a season. I thought that was one of the requirements of haiku?

Cathy

I'm adding another link here...
I just came across Richard Wright's work,
and he write mostly in 5-7-5!
A fascinating poet, and his words make one
pause:

http://www.terebess.hu/english/haiku/wright.html


Lary

[JustDaniel]

branches crackle
as wind whips through;
trunk groans