Posted by: 4rum Apr 13 10, 06:03
George hurried home for a nooner
When he was eclipsed by a lunar
Missing his mark
There in the dark
Poor George instead faced a mooner
Posted by: Peggy Carpenter Harwood Apr 13 10, 16:43
Hi Sam,
I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon.
Peggy
Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Apr 14 10, 07:13
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I would add a beat to the last line - you could do so easily with "Georgie".
Fun read!
~C;ep "Read:
Posted by: 4rum Apr 14 10, 11:18
QUOTE (Peggy Carpenter Harwood @ Apr 13 10, 16:43 )
Hi Sam,
I like four of the lines very much but don't know what you mean by "lunar." Is it possible for the moon to eclipse the sun at noon? I thought that the moon was on the opposite side of the world at noon.
Peggy
The intent was to rhyme with nooner, nothing more. It's a limerick.
'rum
Posted by: 4rum Apr 14 10, 11:22
QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Apr 14 10, 07:13 )
!
I would add a beat to the last line - you could do so easily with "Georgie".
Fun read!
~C;ep "Read:
George hurried home for a nooner
When he was eclipsed by a lunar
Missing his mark
There in the dark
Poor Georg
ie instead faced a mooner
Thanks Lori
'rum