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Aug 16 03, 17:17
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This one has been polished on another site, but I felt it was appropriate to post here, because it's full of Greek gods of the skies. Uranus ... Greek god of the heavens Nyx … Greek goddess of the night Selene … Greek goddess of the moon Gaia ... Greek goddess of the earth Helios … Greek god of the sun
I have recently revised this again with a new title.
Heaven's Vault Uranus’ heavens blaze with lustrous lights when clouds abate. I marvel at the sight of diamantes jewelling the skies; as sentries watch with Nyx’ eternal eyes, Selene outstretched illuming arms to guide our footsteps through the dark. A slumbrous tide embraces Gaia’s realm, while Nyx enshrouds her sequined tapestry, with misted clouds.
When Nyx dispels her shadows I awake, and Helios’ gold chariot now breaks the dawn. His journey yields a fervid glow, to scorch and thaw the glacial winter snow. The horses gallop, leaving clouds behind; diurnal skies are heated for mankind.
He journeys on as temperature declines, then night’s bespangled wealth begins to shine. Selene bestows her light for Nyx to stroke the rhinestones that adorn her velvet cloak.
Black Velvet and Diamonds
I gazed towards a cloudless sky that night and felt aglow, to see a vivid sight. For night was sprinkled with bold winking eyes as diamonds dazzled blackened velvet skies. Selene stretched out her arms of light to guide, diffused in darkness till the day. A tide of slumber covered me in dreams of Nyx, nocturnal goddess of Chaotic mix.
The night recedes with dreams and I awake, when Helios rides his chariot to break the dawn. This journey swells his fervid glow, to scorch and thaw the glacial winter’s snow. His horses gallop leaving clouds behind and warms the azure sky for all mankind.
As day time ebbs, the fierce sun chills. I pine for those nocturnal goddess jewels to shine. Selene illuminates the dark, for Nyx to stroke the diamonds scattered on her velvet cloak.
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Aug 16 03, 17:42
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Snow, as Zeus, leader of all gods, I must say, you have portrayed a bright , beautiful picture in words, of some of my children as they play in the heavens. :angel: Your imagery stirs the imagination. I am not to good on the techy things, but from the throne I sit upon, there are none. Larry - z2
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Aug 17 03, 18:56
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QUOTE (Eisa @ Aug. 16 2003, 17:17) This one has been polished on another site, but I felt it was appropriate to post here, because it's full of Greek gods of the skies. Nyx … Greek goddess of the night, daughter of Chaos Selene … Greek goddess of the moon Helios … Greek god of the sun Black Velvet and Diamonds I gazed towards a cloudless sky that night and felt aglow, to see a vivid sight. For night was sprinkled with bold winking eyes as diamonds dazzled blackened velvet skies. Selene stretched out her arms of light to guide, diffused in darkness till the day. A tide of slumber covered me in dreams of Nyx, nocturnal goddess of chaotic mix. The night recedes with dreams and I awake, when Helios rides his chariot to break the dawn. This journey swells his fervid glow, to scorch and thaw the glacial winter’s snow. His horses gallop leaving clouds behind and warms the azure sky for all mankind. As day time ebbs, the fierce sun chills. I pine for those nocturnal goddess jewels to shine. Selene illuminates the dark, for Nyx to stroke the diamonds scattered on her velvet cloak. Hello Eisa~
This is absolutely breathtaking, filled with sparkling imagery!
I found there to be both a magical as well as ethereal feel to this wonderful expression!
I will pay you the same compliment you paid to me, in that I look forward to reading more of your awesome work!
In love~ Aphrodite
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Aug 18 03, 07:33
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QUOTE (Zeus² @ Aug. 16 2003, 17:42) Snow, as Zeus, leader of all gods, I must say, you have portrayed a bright , beautiful picture in words, of some of my children as they play in the heavens. Your imagery stirs the imagination. I am not to good on the techy things, but from the throne I sit upon, there are none. Larry - z2 Hi Zeus
It's always good to hear from you. Thank you for your words of encouragement that put a spring in my step and helps me shine
Eisa
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Aug 29 03, 23:05
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Hi, I really like this one. Andrea
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Aug 30 03, 00:01
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Fully enjoyed for the ease of travel through from one totally new to your kingdom covered.
Brahms
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Aug 30 03, 07:15
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Your imagery and feel/mood to this one sings!
Nicely done Snow!
Thanks for adding a tile in style to the Mosaic! :dance:
~Cleo :pharoah:
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Aug 30 03, 18:48
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Lovely poem Eisa,
Since you envoked goddess Nyx, which the high and mighty Zeus took care not to transgress, I wondered about the lineage of the creation myth. Nuances are afoot. Erebus was Greek goddess of dark, which must be different than sister goddess of night, Nyx.
Not to pick apart the poem because it is delightful. Though you may be interested in the geneology--so to speak--below showing the stars need more than "night" or "dark."
If a poem encluded all the crummy facts it would be charmless.
Stars like diamonds is pretty common analogy anymore. Your metaphors, otherwise, are outstanding.
Stars need more than sister goddesses of night & dark: "...if the different sections or gods are created through procreation, then there were times when some of them did not exist, since they are the children of those who came before them. So, for example, when Nyx (Night) appeared in the world, there was no starry sky by night, since there was no Sky (Uranus) at the moment, and the stars were yet to be born. Going thus back in the chain of Creation or Procreation..."
Thank you very much for the opportunity to read your poem.
Don
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Sep 5 03, 03:11
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QUOTE (Don @ Aug. 30 2003, 18:48) Lovely poem Eisa,
Since you envoked goddess Nyx, which the high and mighty Zeus took care not to transgress, I wondered about the lineage of the creation myth. Nuances are afoot. Erebus was Greek goddess of dark, which must be different than sister goddess of night, Nyx.
Not to pick apart the poem because it is delightful. Though you may be interested in the geneology--so to speak--below showing the stars need more than "night" or "dark."
If a poem encluded all the crummy facts it would be charmless.
Stars like diamonds is pretty common analogy anymore. Your metaphors, otherwise, are outstanding.
Stars need more than sister goddesses of night & dark: "...if the different sections or gods are created through procreation, then there were times when some of them did not exist, since they are the children of those who came before them. So, for example, when Nyx (Night) appeared in the world, there was no starry sky by night, since there was no Sky (Uranus) at the moment, and the stars were yet to be born. Going thus back in the chain of Creation or Procreation..."
Thank you very much for the opportunity to read your poem.
Don Oh Hi Don
I've only just found your reply here.Thank you for your very nice comments, and also for all the information about the gods which I found fascinating. I must admit I did not do much research into this as my poem originally didn't include the gods,but in revision I brought in`dreams of Nyx'. It was then that someone suggested I brought in Selene and Helios....and that's how I arrived with the poem as it stands. I am always writing poems about the skies ( I seem to have a fascination for this, so who knows...one day I might use all your info in another poem. :pharoah2
Thanks Don
Eisa
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