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Posted by: Athena Jan 29 04, 01:27

Hi Folks,

I've loved all your haikus so very much that after reading all of them again, I've decided to begin a SEPARATE thread for Interactive Haiku.  So,  please use this thread for the "train fashion haiku" and the initial haiku thread for standard haiku.  Thanks so much, y'll!!

How about attempting to write one a day for 15 or 30 days in a row?  Anyone game to commit to this endeavor?  

I'll begin this thread:

The next author will begin their haiku with "capricious nature".  OK Everyone, let's goooooo!!!!    

Posted by: Jan 29 04, 02:09

Dear Dolly

This may not be quite the direction that you hoped this would go, but you know, an eternal truth is an eternal truth !

COUNTERPOINT

Capricious nature :
what you can have you don't want;
that's women for you !

Love
Alan

Posted by: Athena Jan 29 04, 05:40

Yes, Alan, absolutely!  Wonderful!

Posted by: Jan 29 04, 05:49

Dear Dolly

Your last line is 6 syl, so I've shortened it here :


Keepers of the flame
the hearth, home, and family ?
Demand equal rights !

Love
Alan

Posted by: Athena Jan 30 04, 04:07

Thank you so much, Alan!  What a goof I made, but it's neither the first nor the last, I'm afraid.  I've taken the liberty of correcting my haiku.  Here's my rendering for this day/night:

Posted by: Dove Feb 1 04, 18:43

"good for all concerned?"
the cotton dandelion asks
as he floats away.

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Feb 1 04, 19:58

Posted by: Feb 1 04, 20:37

WHETHER FORECAST

In a rising cloud
there should be enough moisture
for a morning wash .....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 1 04, 23:20

base ‘n’ ewer

for a mourning wash
slip on bathroom rug… head first
into toilet bowl

© M Lee Dickens’ son (Daniel) 01 Feb 2004

Posted by: Athena Feb 2 04, 00:38

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 3 04, 08:23

waste-deep advice

next lie ~ float, don’t swim;
your flailing draws a tension…
a sinking feeling

M Lee Dickens’ son (Daniel) 03 Feb 2004

Posted by: Feb 3 04, 08:32

FLYING FISH OR FISHING FLIES ?

a-sinking feeling :
up is down and down is up,
neither fish nor fowl !

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: Athena Feb 3 04, 16:34

Have We Gone A-Petting?

neither fish nor fowl
are my horses, dogs, cats and goats
all love just the same

© D R Harris - 3 February 2004
All rights reserved as an unpublished work

Posted by: Feb 4 04, 20:50

PARTS OF THE TRUTH, THE PARTIAL TRUTH, AND NOTHING BUT THE PARTIAL TRUTH

All love "just" the same
except adversorials :
those half-truth lawyers

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 4 04, 23:28

Posted by: Athena Feb 4 04, 23:41

Posted by: Feb 5 04, 05:24

Dear Dolly

Couldn't figure out what you meant until I checked back to Daniel's last line.

I find that you have used a very witty "same sound" word, but have to tell you it is spelled "gnu" !

Love
Alan


BLESSED SLEEP, FOR ONCE

One per year is borne,
dreaded too - rather sleep than
party, New Year's Eve.

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: Athena Feb 5 04, 06:22

Thank you, Alan!  You saved me!     I've amended the blight!

Have a great day!

Dolly  

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 5 04, 06:31

ur in al their dreams

party knew your sieve
would clog eventually…
when you would be pissed

© M Lee Dickens’ son 05 Feb 2004

Posted by: Athena Feb 7 04, 21:41

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 8 04, 06:04

sweet for bit ‘er

life returns to bless
a saddened soul who curses
someone who loves back

© Daniel J Ricketts 08 Feb 2004

Posted by: Feb 8 04, 06:23

THE EYES DON'T HAVE "IT" !

Someone who loves back
has problems with eye contact
loving in the dark .....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 8 04, 19:41

thanks; you needed that

loving in darkness
means turning the other cheek
lifting up the Light

© Daniel J Ricketts 08 Feb 2004

Posted by: Athena Feb 8 04, 21:00

lifting up the Light
shines hope for all people
better pay light bill

© D R Harris - 8 February 2004

Posted by: Athena Feb 13 04, 01:49

How To Play

Better pay light bill
by obeying all the rules;
else live in darkness

© D R Harris - 12 February 2004

Posted by: Feb 13 04, 02:43

Dear Dolly

"How To Play

Better pay light bill
by obeying all the rules;
else live in darkness"


My version :

How To Really Play

Better pay light bill
but by breaking all the rules;
else live in darkness

Wadja think ? You and me might well be chalk and cheese !

Love
Alan

Posted by: Athena Feb 13 04, 03:19

Hahahahah Alan, you're funny!  What in the world is "chalk and cheese"?  You're cleverly creative and humorous, my friend!

Posted by: Feb 13 04, 04:23

Dear D

Part of expression "As different as chalk and cheese".



Alan

Posted by: Dove Feb 13 04, 16:00

In what looks mundane
hides periwinkle buds
beneath frozen ground.

Posted by: Feb 13 04, 18:58

The Daily Grind

Beneath frozen grounds
of coffee is much flavor,
trying to get out .....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 13 04, 19:08

beneath frozen ground
lies drunk driver’s boxed trophy
of his bent elbow

Posted by: Feb 13 04, 19:17

FESTIVE RIGHTS

Of has-been tallow
there lies much about the church
from festive rites.

Love
Alan

Posted by: Athena Feb 13 04, 23:40

Rituals

from (some) festive rites
we learn of people's cultures,
oddities and lore


© D R Harris - 134 February 2004

Posted by: Athena Feb 14 04, 05:26

Very interesting haiku, Grace, dear!  But, this is the INTERACTIVE HAIKU thread.  If I could figure out how to move a posting, which still eludes me, I'd move this haiku over to the regular haiku thread  ...   :wink:  :oops:   But, I don't know how to.  

Anyhow, I do like what this one says!  

Hugs,

Dolly    :butterfly:

Posted by: Cybele Feb 14 04, 05:33

Sorry Dolly  :blush21:
This follows your haiku about the gnu
Posted: Feb. 04 2004, 22:41

I thought it was the last page!  My head is not on quite straight this morning.  :speechless:
I shall remove it now.

Love

Grace

Posted by: Athena Feb 14 04, 05:33

Posted by: Athena Feb 14 04, 05:35

NO, NO, NO ... NOT NOW!!  I've just written a haiku on yours!!  

Well, whatever you decide to do, I'll follow, OK?

Hugs,

Dolly    :lovie:

Posted by: Feb 14 04, 05:36

Dear Grace and Dolly

Well now, Grace has removed the post which followed on from one on page 1, then Dolly interactives with the removed post, causing hiccoughs in all hte wrong places.

I vote Grace re-enters her haiku !

Love
Alan

Posted by: Athena Feb 14 04, 05:38

  Me too!

Dolly

Posted by: Cybele Feb 14 04, 05:40

Whoops!  


Trying again to get the thread of things Dolly  :blush21:

Posted by: Cybele Feb 14 04, 06:03

Hi Dolly and Alan,

Well, having thoroughly messed up your interactive haiku and at the request of Alan I call "fainites" (that Dolly roughly translated means I can't be punished for my transgressions or I call a truce!). So here we go, back to the original follow on

Love

Grace

Posted by: Feb 14 04, 06:11

Well, folks, I doubt if we can get any MORE interactive than this !

Love
Alan

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 16 04, 10:48

Hi Dolly and Alan,

Well, having thoroughly messed up your interactive haiku and at the request of Alan I call "fainites" (that Dolly roughly translated means I can't be punished for my transgressions or I call a truce!). So here we go, back to the original follow on

one born every year
so, was Barnum's famous quote
exaggerated?

Love

Grace

Posted by: Athena Feb 17 04, 02:46

Reality

though they seldom are
we want friendships to be loyal
love works hard to bind

© D R Harris - 16 February 2004

Posted by: Dove Mar 12 04, 04:16

Love works hard to bind
lovers who gave up their lives
to raise their children.

Posted by: Athena Mar 13 04, 03:23

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 6 04, 08:43

Posted by: JustDaniel Jun 11 04, 06:16

opening hearts wide
risks the entrance of scoundrels
but open I’ll be

Posted by: Jun 11 04, 17:26

BILLY

Butt open ? I'll be
damned if that's the way to get
drink from a tin can.

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 12 04, 07:38

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 12 04, 08:05

Posted by: JustDaniel Jun 12 04, 13:40

once found, age comes off
as though it has deep wisdom
but it's head's died... white

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 20 04, 08:33

Posted by: JustDaniel Jun 20 04, 14:55

shrunken be thy name
though all you ever wanted
comes... but ain't enough

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jun 20 04, 15:37

Posted by: JustDaniel Jun 20 04, 16:16

hot flashes arf you?
must be hard being a (blank)
going through the change?


grinnin' Lightly, Daniel  

... and KIDDING!

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jul 8 04, 06:21

Posted by: JustDaniel Jul 10 04, 09:39

fife's mini-series
wouldn't drum up much business;
it's just a pipe dream

Posted by: heartsong7 Jul 20 04, 16:05

Posted by: JustDaniel Jul 20 04, 23:30

America Bets on Ross

when we made her sew
did stars and stripes forever;
had to raise a staff

Posted by: JustDaniel Sep 23 04, 15:28

hard to raise a staff
and hold it there for too long;
Pharaoh bet Red, lost

Posted by: JustDaniel Jan 24 05, 13:17

Pharaoh a bit red,
losing himself on Cleo;
made asp of himself

Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 4 05, 10:52