Hello Hep,
Welcome to Mosaic Musings. This is very strong, descriptive writing and it seems as if I read it before. I am not sure so perhaps you might let me know if you've posted this somewhere before. My mind doesn't keep things all in one place anymore... LOL
Anyway... The opening and closing are excellent. I did find myself rereading and grasping for some connectiong to L1, S3...
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the palm father gripped to cross at the light. Grope for
dream-moths among dust clouds. Giggle a blush each time
Left me somewhat baffled. If you can return to reply to others that have left you warm welcomes and wonderful comments, and perhaps give me some interp on this stanza, I can offer my further thoughts that might help to improve this to it's highest potential.
Best Regards, Liz