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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ Poetry Exhibition -> Plato's Pearls of Wisdom _ Tomorrow's Seeds

Posted by: Larry Sep 20 16, 21:17

Tomorrow’s Seeds

Each curve, an invitation to appease
some hunger deep within. The epicure
may see a flower’s fruit that’s sure to please
the palette but the mind remains unsure.

Its alabaster flesh awaits the touch
of teeth and lips or eager tongue to taste
fruition’s flavors; ripening that such
a sweet delight may seldom go to waste.

But colors fade; their crowns of gold or red
will dissipate with age from pleasure’s light
and in time’s wake, an aftertaste of dread
will fill the mouth. Such is an artist’s plight

to capture precious moments with their eye
and gift tomorrows with those seeds which die.

thx Syl!

Posted by: Psyche Sep 23 16, 00:30

It's a beautiful sonnet, Larry!

But colors fade; their crowns of gold or red
will dissipate with age from pleasure’s light
and in time’s wake, an aftertaste of dread
will fill the mouth. Such is an artist’s plight

to capture precious moments with their eye
and gift tomorrows with those seeds which die.

Love the above stanzas. Is this the volta? Excuse my ignorance. Appears to me that your sonnet changes its tone here. Sad but true.

Thanks so much for moving it over here. How about Herme's as well?
Syl

Posted by: Larry Sep 23 16, 08:25

Hi Syl,

Yes, the denoted stanza is what is considered the Volta or turn. It is, or should be, a culmination of the above two stanzas or a point of reference in nearly all sonnets.

I will post my poems anywhere you wish them to be posted. I'd say I don't want to hog the posts in any forum but there are few people around to protest. Oh well!

Larry

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Oct 3 16, 15:23

Hi Larry,

A very visual, flowing sonnet! You always seem to write them with such ease!

This one is no exception ~ I love the idea planted in my mind -- sleeping beauty and that dreaded 'sweet treat'!

My fav is actually the green apple - granny smith - they make a lovely apple pie too!

Enjoyed the read!
~Cleo

Posted by: Larry Oct 4 16, 23:42

Hello, Hello Lori,

Thank you for coming by. Golden Delicious apples are my favorite.

I am disappointed in the fact that no one has picked up on the duality of my sonnet or if they did, didn't mention it. I am glad you liked it though. You and a bunch of others are sorely missed here at MM.

I do hope everything is wonderful in your life and that you have found a new job.

Larry