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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ Poetry Education -> Karnak Crossing _ Etheree
Posted by: JustDaniel Aug 22 07, 04:20
Etheree [eh-thuh-ray] consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. It is like an inverted nonet with an extra line.
Etheree may also be reversed (inverted) and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. When writing multiple stanzas, the pattern of the original (whether standard or inverted) generally continues in the subsequent stanzas.
Here are two of mine:
Love
ethere it is, or...
plunge
yourself
in… to love
bottomlessly
and you’ll discover
that it is not baseless
though somewhat ethereal
when action's truly the real thing...
it carries more weight than you can bear;
while there may seem no rhyme, there is reason
© MLee Dickens'son 23 Feb 2004
Revised 16 July 2007
Free Love
Can
someone
demonstrate
that he has love
apart from actions?
He'll not ask one thing
in return for what he gives
but good for the one receiving
though the recipient may hate him
all through the process of being given.
© MLee Dickens'son 21 Aug 2007
Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Aug 22 07, 05:18
Thanks Daniel,
I could of sworn we'd posted this form before, but alas, it wasn't ehre - so thanks again! Are there any rhyming requirements or is it based soley on the syllables/lines?
Both poems are a very powerful example of the form - thanks again!
~Cleo 
Posted by: Peterpan Aug 22 07, 07:26
Hi Daniel~
Thank you again for the poetry education. I rely on you!
Extremely interesting?
PP
Posted by: JustDaniel Aug 22 07, 08:38
Thank you, Lori and Bev!
Yes, I thought that this form had been posted too, as I was going to refer to it for one of the members who asked about it... but after searching over the three pages three times (You know how I can overlook things with my dyslexia, so I have to do things multiple times!), I couldn't find it either and just took the chance that it really wasn't there. I'm surprised, but I didn't want this form to go unused here.
Like the nonet (Is that posted here?) it is purely syllabic, and there are no other requirements... except, of course, to not merely chop narrative or prose up into arbitrary chunks. I personally like to have each line share a complete thought or portions of a thought. I also personally work at line length if possible to present a pleasing picture.
Lightly, Daniel
Posted by: JustDaniel May 2 12, 12:11
Across two vast seas once separating
widely divergent cultures and lands
segregated in sovereign realms,
we’d subjugate for ourselves
dim knowledge of an orb
spinning east to west.
May all the north
now embrace…
let peace
spring,
fall
southward
till trees blaze
loud freedom hues
though skies be ashen
and ill winds whip briskly
… yet cool old blood-spirits
to take solace in broken ground
till covered anew with gentler snow
spreading freely to reflect God’s glory
© MLee Dickens'son 20 March 2004
welcoming the first day of spring / fall
in two hemispheres
Posted by: Larry May 2 12, 17:08
this form,
Ethere;
Where is it from?
Did you invent it?
I've seen the name before
and thought it was a perfume.
It's even an album's title
by an Italian band - Letargica
but, according to the rules of this form
I won't leave you hanging with a "ca"
so I will add the inversion.
Expressing oneself this way
takes a lot of thinking
about what is said
and each word used
to convey
meaning
best.
Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 23 13, 12:42
peer
a m i d
poetry’s
formal array;
you’ll find Ethere
compiling wisps of tears
to slip down its soft’ning cheeks
and reflect cool mourn’s warming sun
‘til they collect themselves… to shimmer
while their soul swims through your lost memories
© MLee Dickens'son
Posted by: Larry Feb 24 13, 14:48
mixed with the memories soon to be lost
are reminders of what might have been
were knowledge to feed discretion
on our path from womb to grave
but those are mere regrets,
with little substance
which fade away
when a smile
brightens
eyes,
dim
with age,
my young son
and granddaughter
race in the back yard
trailing squeals of laughter
which entice the dog to join in
the game of tag played in my youth
and no thought of tomorrow encroached
on that moment when memories were made
Daniel, I hope this meets with your approval in both form and content.
Larry
Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 24 13, 19:24
I heartily applaud you on both fronts, my dear friend! Stirring and deLightful!
Posted by: Larry Feb 25 13, 15:58
Daniel,
Thank you, kind sir. Perhaps I will try a few more.
Larry
Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 27 13, 13:48
Gold-
wonder
kill-shot me
a world away;
I can hear the wind
thru the keyhole, as of
the last policeman's whistle.
Why did I forsake my homestead
for but the prospect of shine shine shine?
I'm charred and scruffed like the fallen angel.
Who'd ever find a land more kind than home?
But the shadow of night spills darkness;
I've become but shadow and bone.
The song of Achilles warns
about the long walk back.
Though Dad bid me go
Mom will be there
defending
Jacob's
son.
© MLee Dickens'son 2013
from 15 challenge titles, in order: Gold, Wonder, Kill Shot, A World Away, The Wind Through the Keyhole, The Last Policeman, Shine Shine Shine, Charred & Scruffed, The Fallen Angel, A Land More Kind Than Home, Shadow of Night, Shadow and Bone, The Song of Achilles, The Long Walk, Defending Jacob
Posted by: Larry Mar 6 13, 23:51
Daniel,
This is an absolute gem. You got this from challenge titles? Fantastic job.
Larry
Posted by: JustDaniel Mar 7 13, 00:53
Thanks so very much, Larry. It was a challenge indeed, but seeing them as a puzzle can be very intriguing!
book
TITLES
may wander
ev'ry which way
but stitch together
as a distinctive quilt,
a patchwork of emotion
distilled of various authors
who would not expect their ideas
to be laid out and framed on one canvas
© MLee Dickens'son 2013
Posted by: Larry Mar 7 13, 18:03
cut
and mesh
parts that name
the worlds in them,
unglossed challenge to
rip life from their sanctum;
intriguing tease which can lure
new readers or those who’ve known
grand visions you’ve revealed in the past.
Posted by: JustDaniel Mar 12 13, 17:04
love
leisure
and your soul
morphs with a thief
who now rides tandem;
he'll cause you to wander
away from well-chosen steps
and compel you to charge items
laughing at you from those online sites
until they foreclose on your home mortgage
© MLee Dickens'son 2013
from Challenge words, in order: love, leisure, soul, morph, tandem, wander, step, compel, charge, home
Posted by: Larry Mar 15 13, 15:16
stall
and do
less as you
e-shop. Bargains,
selling through E-bay,
may not be the best plan
and are frequently third rate
knock-offs. An overpriced surfeit
extensively larger than your brains.
Posted by: JustDaniel Dec 15 18, 14:36
brain
cannot
acrostic
everything
as you like to do;
I'll not even attempt
to align and malign words
to impress you -- as though I could
-- and please don't feel that you are required
to throw this friend down while splaying yours out
Posted by: Larry Dec 17 18, 16:07
ours
plods thru
each critic;
riles the skeptic
as to who’s the one
to subvert the process
instead of seeing success
opens ways to traverse the cliff
nonchalantly until they watch you
sliding easily down the long steep hill
Posted by: JustDaniel Dec 22 18, 21:10
hill
is to
get me off;
hot fear of height
arched up there lofty
because I'm simply a
over-achieving boob. I
verify it's true that I am
even numbered among unevens
Posted by: Larry Dec 24 18, 23:29
Eve
jacked up
Eden’s lei,
causing epic
trials for me and you
through consuming fruit for
hedonism from a snake
and was banned from the area
that may have been a bit of heaven
Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 21 19, 16:49
yourself
by letting
your emotions
spill out of your mouth
and you will find freedom
to maybe write some of them
to produce something of beauty
or just plop them down here on the page
where they'll cause joy to you and one other
Posted by: Larry Feb 23 19, 15:56
her
assets
liven eyes
for someone who
finds them appealing
and if she happens to
speak to you while she’s passing
then I would say look at her facial
expression to see if there’s a smile,
repulsive disdain or show of power
Posted by: JustDaniel Feb 24 19, 05:44
dark eyes
looking back
from her casket
as you passed in line
touching her cold finger
that you felt pointing at you
from abuse that you put on her
up until last week's untimely death?
it's amazing that your heart hasn't burst
Do you notice that wherever you stand, this one is perfectly pointing right at you? LOL
Posted by: Larry Feb 25 19, 16:24
bursts
bubbles;
belching babes
bathe bassinets,
burp pads or blankets
before blotched up sitters
begin cleaning up the blobs,
bile and bright banana purees.
bottle feeding works without big breasts
bared but big burps are better than behinds
Posted by: Larry Mar 28 19, 14:38
hinds
are does
possessed by
powerful stags
you’ll need to bypass
because the stags have horns,
usually large and sharp
causing horrid wounds to any
kind of foe or rival vying for
some attention from deer that they hold dear
Posted by: Larry Apr 11 19, 22:09
dear
echo,
a thing I
did not recall,
insists I believe
no one else wrote a word
since all writers are gone from
our halls; and their lone alibi
makes my questing heart and mind ask when
each one left, did they think the door was locked
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