Thank you so much, Larry!
I'm wanting to gradually cull out some pieces that might be publication-worthy that I haven't looked at for a while, and this was the first one that came to mind, since it's so to the point of what we'd really like to see happening here, if only we could see others joining us again! It was my feeling back then, as it is now.
As to what I think needs polishing, I simply want other eyes and ears. Often when we read our own pieces, we don't see the stumbles, hiccups and warts that stick out from others' reading, so this is the place to find whatever may be there.
... and of course I'm looking for 'no holds barred', as I've developed a bit of a thick skin over the years. I'm just looking to improve my writing... and to help others to do the same.
I'm not much help in the other forum -- free verse -- but occasionally I try my hand at it. Critiquing free verse, to me, challenges my ADHD mind, because changes can go in hundreds of directions, while the strictures of rhyme and meter... or at least form, limit the directions within the scope of my poor brain!
deLighting in feedback, Daniel