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 Sep 11 08, 13:22
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral  |
involving us all,
the Large Head-On Collider questions tomorrow ·······  ······· |
  
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Sep 12 08, 06:47
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
It certainly does, Wally. I just posted some commentary in Alan's thread too in Seren's. Glad to see his peom inspired this one!
 I assume this is a Senryu since it's about people and has no seasonal element. Japanese forms are not my forte, and when we opened this forum last year, it was done so at the urging of 3 ex-members who were supposed to teach us the finer aspects of the short forms and hopefully the outcomes would create a higher appreciation in the process. Unfortunately after a short 2 months of postings in Shogun's, they left the site and have not returned, which is very disheartening. Some are toting the experiments in Geneva as 'the end of the world' - but I am fascinated by science - seems like a scene from Star Trek or 2001: Space Odyssey.  Hope we're still here tomorrow to laugh about the test!  Enjoyed the read, ~Cleo 
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Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Sep 12 08, 16:13
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 Babylonian Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty |
Toth:
I agree with its being a senryu. The metrics are very good. I also liked the subject matter. Got room to include a Higg's (?) boson? ace |
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Sep 24 08, 07:34
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
Hello Wally,
Yeah, once again Spot On.  By the way. The big bang! Well, it was a fizzer... Just shows ya. Doooooooo not tamper with the the secrets of creation n' ??? ... UUUUUUnniverse. ~`~```~~~ jOHN ······· ·······Arnfinn
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