Hi Dolly!
Another cool piece!
I'm thinking about the word 'hiding' - for some reason it sticks out? What about straying perhaps?
Hugs!
~Cleo :)
Wouldn't life be dull if we never took the odd risk or chance--wise words.
Gerry.
Hi there, Dolly!
I enjoyed your cinquain. :) I have noticed you seem to have a knack for these, which I admire. I am fond of the form, but I have trouble compacting a solid message into so few lines. You do it quite well! :)
I can relate to this piece.....I guess it's the risk-taking "Aries" in me...
Take care and happy writing!
~Amy~
I enjoyed your cinquain. :) I have noticed you seem to have a knack for these, which I admire. I am fond of the form, but I have trouble compacting a solid message into so few lines. You do it quite well! :)
I can relate to this piece.....I guess it's the risk-taking "Aries" in me...
Take care and happy writing!
~Amy~
Hi Amy,
Glad you liked this wee poem. I had the same problem in the beginning, with feeling the need of too many words. I'm still working on it, but the way I began was reading Daniel's fine cinqs and then writing a poem about some subject, using as few words as possible. Then, I began eliminating words in order to fit the poem's syllable count ... lo and behold, I found I didn't really NEED all the words I'd thought I did.
Thanks for your compliments and good luck in writing one of your own! When you do, let me know as I want to read it, OK?
Blessings,
Dolly
Hiya Dolly! :)
Melikes!!!!!
:pharoah2
Hey Lori! MELIKESTOO! Thanks for letting me know something needed changing!
Hugs,
Dolly
Dolly,
So much said with few words.
Enjoyed
Dani
Dolly,
so much said poignantly with so few words.
Larry
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