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Oct 26 03, 07:43
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Snowfall
Stargazing luminescent skies, flickers of powdered dust fall upon my pillowcase.
Blustery breezes envelop my waning thoughts of a fetid Holiday leftover.
Winter’s breath resonates fringes of naked skin revealed to Mother Earth.
My eyes fill with whiteout admiring her burdens freely relinquished.
Her radiance warms shimmering moonlight amidst atmospheric gloom.
No two alike, yet notably analogous, flakes falls unprejudiced.
I contemplate moments of childhood recollection with a shiver and smile.
© 2003 Lorraine M Kanter
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Jul 6 04, 05:08
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Am I free too
to speak?
... but then who am I to prejudice you with the thought that it could be dandruff?
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Jul 9 04, 07:43
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 20 04, 16:45
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Hi Lori,
Believe or not, and this could be my taste speaking, if fact no doubt, to me (is that enough disclaiming yet? ), you have a stronger voice in free verse. It may not be to your liking, but you come across to me more natural in free verse! And this was only your first piece?
I'm very impressed. The words and phrasing in S3, 5, 6 and 7 are all meaningful, more so, to me, well felt and delicately fell.
David :)
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Aug 21 04, 12:34
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Real Name: Susan Eckenrode
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fine imagery, flow and feel...but gotta ask, what's with the 'flickers of powdered dust on the pillow case"?...flecks of flaky skin caused by dry winter air...or maybe, fairy dust? :speechless:
nice work...you're a natural for FV. :pharoah2 Sue
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