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 Apr 1 12, 16:03
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 Assyrian  Posts: 240 Joined: 23-November 07 From: Lake Erie North Shore Member No.: 482 Real Name: Frances Kennedy Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eric Linden  |
Please note while critique is not requested, feel free. This is written in answer to Merlin's call. F
Dancing in the Rain Again There’s always time for dancing in the rain and soirees lit by moonlight. You alone know better than the best to split champagne; a deux what two can do to monotone! I hasten to recall when Cupid hit and then, as now, I hardly stood a chance, except this time I recognize the fit is perfect for adventure and romance. I’ve wandered lost out in the universe that beckoned for my answer to its call. Although I've fared, and well, it's but a curse what nomads such as us bear from a fall. So weary knight, perhaps you too still miss our magic carpet rides through the abyss. MFK Buckley ·······  ······· |
  
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Apr 1 12, 16:08
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Excellent, Fran.
I gotta admit that its a rusty knight at the moment... the pen needs a bit of toon-up! M ······· ······· |
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Apr 1 12, 16:43
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Assyrian Posts: 240 Joined: 23-November 07 From: Lake Erie North Shore Member No.: 482 Real Name: Frances Kennedy Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eric Linden |
Merlin, it takes more than a run-of-the-mill rusty knight to beckon me from penning Spensers alone. Fran ······· ······· |
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Apr 1 12, 21:19
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
I've read this a few times now and am taken by the charm therein...
Did I say - well done? M ······· ······· |
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Apr 1 12, 21:52
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Assyrian Posts: 240 Joined: 23-November 07 From: Lake Erie North Shore Member No.: 482 Real Name: Frances Kennedy Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eric Linden |
To charm you so disarms me that I confess it's had a tad of fine-tooning too. All to say, whenever you're inspired to saddle up your steed I will follow where you lead. F ······· ······· |
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Apr 4 12, 11:34
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear FRan,
An elegant response that features your use of those same rhymes from Merlin's poem. Cheers, jgdittier ······· ······· |
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Apr 4 12, 15:38
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Assyrian Posts: 240 Joined: 23-November 07 From: Lake Erie North Shore Member No.: 482 Real Name: Frances Kennedy Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eric Linden |
Thank you for looking in Ron and lovely to see you. It feels like old home week! I appreciate your notice of the matched end rhymes. It was a twist we threw into our volleys some time back for the fun of it. I trust we can look forward to a verse from you too. Frances ······· ······· |
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Apr 9 12, 10:30
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
I joy at seeing Ron and Eric write
again, so Fran, I thank you for your spark. With dancing such as yours our way to light, this site again will spin out from the dark! deLighting again, Daniel  P.S. re requested crit, I believe your line #12 ought to read 'such as we' ? ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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