 Fair Warning, Times 10 Challenge Sonnet |
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 Feb 24 12, 01:15
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,363 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
Fair Warning
No one can say that it was not foreseen by many who were wise beyond my ken yet treated with disdain. No Nazarene came offering eternity to men. No hosts of Angels, flanked by cherub horde, would bate the mantle’s rent in mother Earth. Her fiery heart had burst and from it poured perdition’s pyre, exhumed. Creation’s birth began once more and spared no man or beast. No mount or vale gave succor, all was gone as longitude and latitude had ceased. Fair Gaia’s lips would never kiss the dawn for Twenty-Twelve has come; none left to save or lay sweet marigolds upon her grave. ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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Feb 24 12, 10:26
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Hey Larry,
Wow I love this. Quite powerful. Especially the opening stanza, there is conviction and sense of demand in the words, a demand for answers of the unknown and worth of existence. Very strong, unintrusive end rhymes, with a smooth blend of inner rhymes that allow the words to flow like a dance from my lips. I was thrilled to learn a new word today, "KEN" is a wonderful discovery for me and I will likely be using it in my future writings. QUOTE Fair Warning No one can say that it was not foreseen by many who were wise beyond my ken yet treated with disdain. No Nazarene came offering eternity to men. No hosts of Angels, flanked by cherub horde, would bate the mantle’s rent in mother Earth. Her fiery heart had burst and from it poured perdition’s pyre, exhumed. Creation’s birth began once more and spared no man or beast. No mount or vale gave succor, all was gone as longitude and latitude had ceased. Fair Gaia’s lips would never kiss the dawn for Twenty-Twelve has come; none left to save or lay sweet marigolds upon her grave. I have not a nit to pick on -- nothing at all, but praise and appreciation for an excellent and skillfully crafted Sonnet, in which I will be reading and rereading, in order to strengthen my own knowledge of the form and how to 'craft excellence!!!" ... I wish I had something of worth to offer, but you've left not a single syllable to mull -- Big Hugs, Liz ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
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Feb 24 12, 16:16
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Larry and Liz,
Larry, as the lady says, and as I expect from you, beautifully crafted. Liz - you have nothing to offer ? How about sheer unadulterated praise ? Something too few poets experience, at least during their lifetimes. Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Feb 24 12, 21:15
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Hello Alan,
It is so good to see you. Yes, praise is a rare commodity, however, I like to offer something significant to back up my praise- however, Larry sometimes just leaves me speechless -- Sometimes, I can only think ... I wish I can write like that!  Blessings to you, Alan ... ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
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Feb 25 12, 12:05
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 Egyptian Posts: 369 Joined: 10-May 11 From: Outskirts of Sonoran Desert Member No.: 4,480 Real Name: JerryK Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Hi Larry, most accomplished sonneteer,
I can only echo the words expressed by Liz and Alan. Great work, well done. Enviously yours, Jerry |
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Apr 5 12, 09:04
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,802 Joined: 24-April 04 From: Connecticut Member No.: 58 Real Name: Ron Jones Writer of: Poetry |
Dear Larry,
A true "think piece" presented with all its poetic ploys. How well you've approached the final couplet... How well that couplet wraps it up. Cheers, jgdittier (I'm hoping for your sequel on 21/12) ······· ······· |
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Apr 5 12, 12:29
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,363 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Gosh Ya'll,
I'm blushing! I appreciate what each of you wrote in praise for my little sonnet which merely rehashes what the Aztecs predicted centuries ago and what Nostradamus reiterated in his quatrains. In writing and posting, I strive to put my best foot forward (pun intended) but sometimes stumble into the realm of trochaic or anipestic meter. I, too often, use a more descriptive but lesser known word and wonder if the reader gets the gist of what I wish to convey. Liz, I know you enjoy my sonnets but I would hope you might write one or two yourself. It just takes time and a little effort to get the metrical flow and rhyme patterns and after a while, one begins to think in those terms and the poem then seems to fall into place. Give it a try! Come on! Alan, praise from you in making something out of a times 10 challenge is very gratifying. You are able to do this far more efficiently and quickly than anyone I've seen. Thanks Jerry, thanks for the visit and the accolades. I enjoy reading your words also. Ron!!! Glad to see you back. MM is looking like old home week with Fran, Merlin and yourself showing up here lately. I've always looked forward to reading each and every one of your posts. Praise from you is a highly sought commodity. Not sure if I understand what sequel (21/12?) you are looking for but if I'm still around in 2112, I'll be glad to write one. Larry Thank you all once more. ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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