 Left In The Wild, Inspired by the book/movie "Into The Wild" |
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| Guest_isis277_* |
 May 11 08, 16:51
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Like Alexander Supertramp
I went for the wild yet seemingly normal and satiating root; secure in its attractive and similar copy. Minute details lost in naive necessity. Gamely gorging as your poison took hold; essential nutrients smothered and lost. Imperceptible at first, this slow starvation; sinews twist and shrink to their final wasteland. Bottom moments left only to gaze upon patches of sky; the heavens calling from my own terrain of wilderness. |
  
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May 13 08, 05:43
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
I haven't seen this movie (or read the book) but your words are very stark, Isis. Is this about a snake attacking their prey or perhaps a lion pride? I can also see this as a metaphor to a relationship gone sour, or a new one in which the main character here goes out on a limb, shreading their 'old persona' for something a bit more 'wild'.
Enjoyed the read, ~Cleo ·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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| Guest_isis277_* |
May 13 08, 16:04
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Hi Cleo
yes this is about a relationship gone sour...but i like your other interpretations better...lol...check out the movie... this poem has been heavily critiqued, mostly negatively, as it doesnt state enough to compare to Chris McCandless's spirit, and not universal enough for all to relate in one way or another...and i agree...but i like it the way it is, and think i wont re-write, but who knows? thanks for your reply.. Isis277 |
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May 20 08, 18:16
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
Hi Isis,
This is a very stark and haunting poem with fantastic alliteration! I feel the nature/struggle in your words and like Lori, interpret this as something more. (that's the beauty of poetry...right?) Imperceptible at first, this slow starvation; sinews twist and shrink to their final wasteland. Exquisite! I look forward to reading more of your work. Lindi ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Sep 26 08, 18:59
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 Assyrian Posts: 271 Joined: 21-July 07 From: somewhere twixt 'n' tween Member No.: 456 Real Name: Sam Richmond Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:N/A |
Stark detail with great impact. I almost felt that I was starting a chapter of Sherlock Holmes (Doyle). Clipped quips, inferrence dependant upon the readers knowledge base make the write all but irresistable to learn more of your subject. Maybe a little specialized, but a read to my liking and taste.
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