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 Nov 17 12, 10:51
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 Greek  Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in  |
Sandy (haiku)
The hurricane comes creeping up the eastern coast. Devastation soon. Peggy ·······  ······· |
  
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Nov 20 12, 15:57
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,376 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hi Peggy/Sandy/???
Glad to see you back but I must say, this one should be posted in Karnak. It was very sad that the east coast got a double whammy from both Sandy and a severe snow storm at the same time. I've been through a few hurricanes down here in S.E. Louisiana and wouldn't wish one on anybody. Again, glad you're back Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
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Nov 22 12, 13:07
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Maggie @ Nov 17 12, 10:51 )  Sandy (haiku) The hurricane comes creeping up the eastern coast. Devastation soon. Hey, Peggy! Great to see you. Actually, this is exactly the place for this haiku, since we no longer have a section specifically for 'short forms'... and in Karnak, we just either learn or practice... and mix in a lot of fun in the process often. HERE, we have the opportunity to offer and receive critique or comments. Just a reminder that normally, haiku do not have titles, capital letters (except for Names and such) and do not use periods. Otherwise I think this piece makes an excellent and timely statement of what happened to us here... though we were fortunate to not be much affected in our little corner of New Jersey on the 'bay side'... though it would likely have been a very different story for us if Sandy had gone up the Delaware Bay as some had forecast. We were directly in its path. Suggestion (without Title), perhaps adding a bit more punch to the first line, something maybe like... Sandy swirls her swath creeping up the eastern coast; devastation soon deLighting in your sharing, Daniel 
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Nov 27 12, 11:46
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Greek Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in |
Hi Larry and Daniel,
Thank you both for your attention to my haiku!!! Always good to hear from you! Daniel, thanks for the tip on periods and capital letters. Happy holidays!!!! Peggy ······· ······· |
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Jan 4 13, 07:35
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Peggy
Daniel is quite right - haiku does belong here as it is a fixed form. Daniel has given some excellent advice - and he is a haiku expert. A timely write - I'm so glad to see it posted here. Snow 
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Jan 7 13, 17:06
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Greek Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in |
Hi Eisa,
Thanks for reading. I thought the poem belonged here because it is fixed form too. The hurricane was terrible. Don't know if haiku nature poems can be unpleasant but I hope so. Ha. Again, thank you! Peggy ······· ······· |
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Jan 7 13, 20:47
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Sandy trampled through
thousands of homes built on sand; FEMA can't fix it ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jan 9 13, 20:16
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Greek Posts: 698 Joined: 29-May 06 From: US East Coast Member No.: 185 Real Name: Peggy Harwood Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:just wandered in |
So true, Daniel.
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