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Voices in the Wind by Michelle, Faery Award Tile #1 |
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Nov 16 03, 09:14
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Hello MM viewers! I'm awarding the Faery Award to this fine piece by Michelle (currrently in Socrate's Synapse). Way to go, Michelle! Thanks for coloring the Mosaic in faery nice style! :pharoah2
Voices in the Wind
To the land’s end, from mountain view, my people wandered free and strong. We followed whispers on the wind, for season's voice then sang and spoke her secrets to our peaceful tribe. But Father Sky departed us.
Before, the earth had cradled us, before the sorrow that I view. Before, Great Spirit watched the tribe, before death took both weak and strong, before white man arrived and spoke his curse of greed into the wind.
My prayers blew on the winter wind. My dance of health could not mend us. The healing words my father spoke had lost their power in our view. My curing herbs that once were strong just eased the pain within the tribe.
Then one by one I lost my tribe, each spirit flew like dust in wind. The spots and fever, strange and strong, encircled and defeated us. So many bodies filled my view. I held each heartache when death spoke.
A few remained but no one spoke of being last to join the tribe. Our people’s future dimmed from view like lifeless leaves on autumn wind. Great Spirit has forsaken us! I wail resentful, sorrow strong.
Alone, the earth is sere and strong. From me, no more words will be spoke to turn Great Spirit’s love to us, for they are gone; my life, my tribe. My weeping rides a tempest wind and mourns tomorrow’s barren view.
I heard strong voices of my tribe that spoke beyond the tomb of wind, “Come join us,” ….hands approach my view.
By Michelle
***SESTINA A fixed form consisting of six 6-line (usually unrhymed) stanzas in which the end words of the first stanza recur as end words of the following five stanzas in a successively rotating order and as the middle and end words of each of the lines of a concluding envoi in the form of a tercet. The usual ending word order for a sestina is as follows: First stanza, 1- 2 - 3 - 4 - 5 - 6 Second stanza, 6 - 1 - 5 - 2 - 4 - 3 Third stanza, 3 - 6 - 4 - 1 - 2 - 5 Fourth stanza, 5 - 3 - 2 - 6 - 1 - 4 Fifth stanza, 4 - 5 - 1 - 3 - 6 - 2 Sixth stanza, 2 - 4 - 6 - 5 - 3 - 1 Concluding tercet: middle of first line - 2, end of first line - 5 middle of second line - 4, end of second line - 3 middle if third line - 6, end of third line - 1
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Nov 17 03, 14:04
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Well done Michelle
A wonderful poem
Tom
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Dec 4 03, 06:07
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Michelle,
As I said in my crit, this is a brilliant poem. It is a very worthy winner. Once again, congratulations to you.
James.
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Dec 6 03, 12:03
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Thanks Cleo, Tom and James,
I'm not sure what the faery award is but I am honored. The picture is great.
Michelle
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