 Happy Mother's Day, A Sonnet to them All |
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 May 6 15, 23:17
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,376 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in.  |
Happy Mother’s Day
The greatest deeds of man throughout the years are nothing but a pittance full of pride which bides its time then slowly disappears. Museums flaunt that hubris lived but died a lonely death with relics from the past. For everything that’s done is done once more and every man still thinks his work will last just like the millions who have gone before. It follows then that some will do things right and mere perfection is the end they seek but pain and worried thoughts must be their plight. Their goal is reached when lying cheek to cheek with new-born babe. A woman’s work will start to form a mother’s greatest work of art. S1/L4 did read: "Museums display that hubris lived and died" ·······  ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner       |
  
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May 7 15, 07:03
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Awe Larry,
  This is so lovely and perfect for celebrating Mother's Day.  I only feel a slight bump with your word choice 'Museums' - perhaps "Great Halls" may work as a sub? It may be that I pronounce it with 3 sylls: myoo-zee-uhm, giving it that extra oomph.  I luv this! ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner       |
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May 7 15, 09:56
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,376 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hi Lori,
You are correct about "mew-zee-ums". I slipped into "Suthun'" mode once more. It will be corrected and hopefully bump-less. Glad you liked it! Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner |
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May 7 15, 13:54
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Larry,
This is wonderful! Your revision of that line is spot on. I Love the word 'flaunt'. We celebrate Mother's Day in March in UK This is just perfect for that. Snow 
······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner   |
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