Lorikeets, Rainbow Lorikeets Options

[Arnfinn]

Rainbow hued, upside down,
clamped tightly to twigs,
mauve bobbing heads, beaks
chattering; busily drawing out
nectar.
Chunks of red bottlebrush
floating and falling. Lawn
magically turned into a botanic
carpet of red and green.

[Cybele]

Oh Arnie!!,

What great imagery! Wish I could see these fascinating birds flying free as nature intended.

One tiny nit. I wish it was longer so that I could go on enjoying.  


Bonzer Job maty    

P.S Have a fish (high accolade!)

[Arnfinn]

Hi Grace  :devil:


Yeah! Our summer starts on 1 December......All the parrots are hanging around....the rainbows hit the Bottle brush.....(about 15 feet tall) about 9am every morning.....they come in a flock about 20........they squark and chatter all time, they pick fights ........should hear the din.

Other birds hanging around are Crimson Rosella's and King Parrots.

The Crimson Rosella's are red with blue wings and tail.  
The King parrots are green with a tourquis fash on wings and scarlet tummies.

You can see what the the Rainbow Lorikeet looks like at the website below.

http://www.birdsnways.com/mowen/rainbows.htm

Arnie..............bringing the Australian buuuuuuuuush to Yooooooooooo.


Regards as always........


John

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi John! :)

I LOVE Lorikeets! Course, why wouldn't I since they have Lori in their name!

I went to Australia back in Nov, 1993 and had the pleasure of seeing them up close and personal! Beautiful birds! A bit annoying, but pretty to look at!

We visited an animal sanctuary in the Gold Coast (I forgot the name, something like Currumbin Sanctuary) and while there, they were doing a feeding of the birds and National Geographic was filming in teh sanctuary for a special. Since I was the foreigner, they asked me to be on film and asked why I liked the birds. It was a HOOT, but I never noticed if I made it on the tv show!  :cali:  :alien2:

When we went to Great Barrier Reef, to Brampton Island, Lorikeets were everywhere! We opened the slider to the deck of our room and about 8 of them flew inside! They'd just come right over and sit on my shoulder (WILD ones). So, I teased them back outside with...YEP - you guessed it _ what does this Lori like most? SUGAR! I'd open sugar packets from the coffee supplies and then walk 'em back out! Very funny! You HAD to be there!

Anyway - I'd like to suggest a stanza break on your piece below.
You could also add to the edn something like, As the feathers fall.?

Lovely!
~Cleo  :pharoah:


Rainbow hued, upside down,
clamped tightly to twigs,
mauve bobbing heads, beaks
chattering; busily drawing out
nectar.

Chunks of red bottlebrush
floating and falling. Lawn
magically turned into a botanic
carpet of red and green.

[Guest__*]

Righto John

These are those noisy little relatives of parrots are they not ?

Lawn
magically turned into a botanic
carpet of red and green.

Not a bit like British pigeons then ?.  

Tom
.

[Guest_Dove_*]

Arn---

I found the first 5 lines very interesting because of the way you punctuated. it a different twist which delighted me.

suggestion: you change tense here and there. specifically L1, L2, and L8.

other than that I wouldn't change a thing! I would kill to see this. my parents house used to attract bluebirds and cardinals daily but nothing compared to this.  :cloud9:

[Charon]

You come to read poetry and you are taught a nature lesson.  How wonderful.  Love nature, love your words of wit.  Thanks for sharing.

AtH

[Arnfinn]

Hey,........Lori.....Yes, you are a very colourful character

You've been up to bananaland.... Yep!.....Currumbin....thousands of Rainbows up there.......that particular sanctuary, been around for over fifty years.


The further north you go, the more varieties :)


The suggestion about, feathers falling......The birds seem to keep em on....?

You might mean to write another stanza....or sumthin

Anywayzzzz...I'll have a look

See YA


jOHN

[Arnfinn]

Hi Tom,





Do mean sumthin like this  ^^^^^^.......Yep! your correct.

HAAAAhaaaaHaaaaaa

Thanks for droppin by.

Regards as always


John

[Arnfinn]

Hey,............Jessica........Yeah, I do get tensed up when I'm writing........your a very carin person

Ya want get on a slippery dip .....and come down n' have a look......up north is beaches and reefs n'stuff.......yeah!......lovely birds.......plus the longest beach in the world at the gold coast.

My country is all green n' small mountains like below



http://www.berry.org.au/


Regards,

John

[Arnfinn]

How's it going A,


Wow.......Hey mate are you a filmstar........or sumthn'......Definitely........a bit of the ol' Kirk........about ya mate.


Yeah,.........Thanks for the kind words.


See ya around


John