Let Us Gather...***, Rhyming couplets (acbd end rhyme scheme) Options

[Luce]

Let Us Gather…REVISION II

Every year the pot comes down
beside Aunt Clara from her roost.

Her cat, the one we almost drowned,
still tries to bite. Thank God for boots.

There's sister Jan and her gang of kids
who'll fill the house with high pitch screams.

There’s cousin Joe who burps and spits
while hollering for his football team.

Our kinfolk come and then they go
all stuffed to burst with the juicy latest.

They fill the pot with all they know
and then they die and go to Vegas.

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Let Us Gather…REVISION

Every year the pot comes down
besides Aunt Clara from her roost.

Her cat, the one we almost drowned,
still tries to bite us. Thank God for boots.

Sister Jan and her gang of kids
fill the house with high pitch screams.

There’s cousin Joe who burps and spits
hollering for his football team.

Families come and families go
stuffed to burst with the juicy latest.

They fill the pot with all they know
then they die and go to Vegas.

Note: Please! No cat was intentionally harmed in the production of this poem. See note way below.

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I was saving this for Christmas - but oh what the heck. Pre-Thanksgiving is close
enough. Besides, the rhyming board seems a little bare.


Let Us Gather… - ORIGINAL

Every year the pot comes down
besides Aunt Clara from her roost.

Her cat, the one we almost drowned,
still tries to bite us. Thank God for boots.

Sister Jan and her gang of kids
fill the house with screams.

While cousin Joe, who spits
his words, cheers for his team.

Relatives come and they go
stuffed with the juicy latest.

They fill the pot with all they know
then they die and go to Vegas.


Luce

Note: Please! No cat was intentionally harmed in the production of this poem. A visiting relative's cat just decided to make a mad dash around the kitchen at the same time another relative was carrying a large pot full of water to put the peeled potatoes in. The cat got wet, the kitchen floor got wet, the relative got very wet.

The boot reference really involved another visiting relative's senior toy poodle who would growl and nip
at your ankles when you came in. It was okay in winter cause we all had boots on because of the cold
weather. Summer was torture though.

Alas, both cat and dog have been in pet heaven for many years now. But after that, no pets were allowed at family gatherings - except for puppies and kittens. Hey we're not that heartless.

[Psyche]

Hi all,
I jumped over the wall from FV and intended to comment on Luce's poem, which is great! Glad to see you've already had great help, Luce.

So I'll just zoom in on the "Edit" problem, because it's annoying. About being a newbie, it's rather funny, since I've been here since 2004 and have posted a lot more than 50 times. And all of a sudden my Edit button has stopped working! I now remember JustDaniel's point that we had "Full Edit" as well, but I don't have that option any more, in fact I can't even "Edit", altho' the button is there.
I changed my mouse, just in case...LOL...and clicked away, but no...out of order.
Can't do anything at all with my titles or even my revisions.
Won't go off in a huff about this. I'll just use Quote or New Reply, trying to include everything at my first go!

While we're at it, personally I don't like using the term 'newbie' for poets who've been writing for years on various forums, and have published books. I use that term for beginners, people who want to learn how to write poetry from scratch.

OK, I'll do some reading here, love R&R! Will return.

Cheers to all,
Psyche