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JustDaniel
post Aug 21 07, 12:05
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Septoling is a brand new form suggested in Norm Pollack's recent postings on his site. Though he had not named it during his experimenting with the concept, I thought I should capture it with that designation. He has agreed.

Like a septolet, it has seven lines, but the similarity ends there. The poem has two stanzas with a syllable count of 7-5-3-1 / 5-7-a single -ing word, such that the poem looks like this:

Single -ing word

xxxxxxx
xxxxx
xxx
x

xxxxx
xxxxxxx
single -ing word


The last single word of the poem becomes the Title

...and it is a gerund (present participle) of any number of syllables.


Norm's first posts in this form:

hibernating

sleep within the folds of air
but do not disturb
the flow of
dreams

i have memories
imbedded with DNA
hibernating



presaging

the winds of our history
cannot blow away
conscience like
sand

civilizations
tell us that "is" becomes "was"
presaging

© Norman S. Pollack


and my own first attempt:

minimalizing

so much wears away with time
but there's more than rhyme
with poets'
terse

appreciation
honestly grows when you stop
minimalizing

© MLee Dickens'son 23 July 2007


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post Aug 22 07, 02:51
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Moderators:

Please correct the TITLE spelling: "Septoling"

Thank you. Love in Light, Daniel sun.gif


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post Aug 22 07, 05:19
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Hi Daniel,

You should be able to edit your titles - plese let me know.

Cleo


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post Aug 22 07, 06:37
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Hi Daniel

How interesting. Perhaps I will take a stab...! Thank you for the intro...!

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post Aug 31 07, 10:27
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Thanks, Bev... and here's another, to encourage you to give it a shot too:

elocuting

politicians like to boast
about what they do…
that our vote
counts

once it has been cast
what we’ll recall is empty
elocuting


© MLee Dickens'son 31 Aug 2007


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post Sep 5 07, 12:00
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de Lighting

Often I'm not very clear
so please always ask
when my words
cloud

I want to impart
knowledge that encourages
delighting


© MLee Dickens'son 04 Sept 2007


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post Sep 5 07, 12:25
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explaining

un-accounted-for doings
don't set very well
with a spouse
so

it's best to walk strait
lest from a tarmac you watch
ex- planing


© MLee Dickens'son 05 Sept 2007


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post Dec 15 18, 15:27
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staring

I'm looking out the window
this grey afternoon;
though no snow,
cold

Christmas is coming
but that evening I'll sit here
staring

© MLee Dickens’son 15 Dec 2018
(Daniel J Ricketts)

at Genesis Center rehab


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post Dec 17 18, 16:02
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Contemplating

Staring at your newest form
brings consternation
and some doubt
so

I’ll give it a shot
but it might take a lot of
contemplating


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post Dec 22 18, 22:00
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Constipating

Sitting on this dug-up form
stirs my intestines
then tightens
them

can't go with the flow
discovering that I'm now
constipating


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post Dec 24 18, 23:26
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Relaxing


Bowels which tighten under stress
may cause abdomens
to bring great
pain,

so draw a hot bath
but get out before you start
relaxing


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