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| Guest_Billydo_* |
 Aug 9 05, 16:07
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 Celtic Castle Designs Argh! I am holding my hands over my ears, arghing. I'll scream again - argh - but you can't see or hear. I'm too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings; if I erupted, it would only make things worse. But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb, replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe: scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you. I wish I could let rip; I'm plastic faced, stiff as tulle, and as transparent. I am dakhma; Trappist; bit-lipped; as a grave. Right, that's it, you've done it now. I'm going to be he-rude-ite; construct an argument so nice; dense, devilish, daedal, that once lured in, you will never escape ... I wish ... Argh! First Version Argh! I am holding my hands over my ears and arghing. I'll scream again - argh - but you can't see or hear. I'm just too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings; if I erupted, it would only make things worse. But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb, replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe: scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you. I wish I could let rip; I'm plastic faced, stiff as tulle, and about as transparent. I am dakhma; Trappist; bit-lipped; as a grave. Right, that's it, you've done it now. I'm going to be he-rude-ite; construct an argument so nice; dense, devilish, daedal, that once sucked in, you will never get out ... I wish ... Argh! |
  
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Aug 9 05, 22:09
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 8,865 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hey Mike !
Happened on this just before bedtime ! Wow... it's kind of refreshing to read a transgressor like u !! It gets better & better (I admit the beginning didn't exactly attract me...). But then.... I wish I could let rip; I'm plastic faced, stiff as tulle, and about as transparent. I am dakhma; Trappist; bit-lipped; as a grave. Right, that's it, you've done it now. I'm going to be he-rude-ite; construct an argument so nice; dense, devilish, daedal, that once sucked in, you will never get out ... I wish ... Argh! Fantastic !! Shall return here when my eyes stop falling out of their sockets. Argh !! Sylvia Shock :p :ring: ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Aug 10 05, 01:02
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Hi Mike
Ah, you have summed up the story of my life. I've been there done that so many times that I've worn out the tshirt, saying nothing wishing I was brave enough to say what I feel, but only thinking about all the things I should have said once I have walked away and also knowing it would achieve nothing to let rip. A couple of suggestions [add] {delete} (comment) I am holding {my} hands over my ears[,] {and} arghing. I'll scream again - argh - but you can't see or hear. I'm {just} too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings; if I erupted, it would only make things worse. But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb, replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe: scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you. (.......I don't get what you mean by double you) I wish I could let rip; I'm plastic faced, stiff as tulle, and {about} as transparent. I am dakhma; Trappist; bit-lipped; as a grave. Right, that's it, you've done it now. I'm going to be he-rude-ite; construct an argument so nice; dense, devilish, daedal, that once sucked in, (.......perhaps swallowed instead of sucked in) {you} will never {get out}[escape] ... I wish ... Argh! I enjoyed the read and one day I too will manage to construct a brilliant argument and astound myself. Nina |
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| Guest_Billydo_* |
Aug 10 05, 11:53
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Hi Sylvia
Me, a transgressor? Surely not. Can I have a special transgressor badge? Glad you enjoyed it. Cheers Mike |
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| Guest_Billydo_* |
Aug 10 05, 11:55
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Hi Nina
This was an incident at work when I but my lip instead of taking the easy option and ripping into them. I like your changes so I'll have a go at them later on. Cheers Mike |
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Aug 10 05, 19:15
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Tee hee!
 Why is it SHE always has the last word? ??? Never mind... This is a very cool piece Mike! I like how you've shaped eah stana giving focus to the most important aspects. I'll be back again soon - right now I can't see anything to nit...  Cheers! ~Cleo :D ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner  |
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| Guest_Billydo_* |
Aug 11 05, 04:35
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Hi Cleo
Thank you very much. Cheers Mike |
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Aug 11 05, 12:55
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 8,865 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
QUOTE(Billydo @ Aug. 10 2005, 14:53) Hi Sylvia Me, a transgressor? Surely not. Can I have a special transgressor badge? Glad you enjoyed it. Cheers Mike Hi Mike ! :sun: Yes, a poet transgressor !! (don't know what u do elsewhere...  )And that's a great idea, let's have an Award for transgressors. I hereby propose to Lori (beep beep, Looooooooooooooooooori.....??) that she add a plaque to her long list of awards: one for super original stuff, cool layouts, nothing trad, inventive language and whatever else constitutes lawlessness in verse... [marquee]:p :alien: :medusa: :upside: :wizard: [/marquee] As far as I'm concerned, you've earned your badge already :cool: Check ya later, Syl :turtle: ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Aug 11 05, 19:19
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
QUOTE(Psyche @ Aug. 11 2005, 13:55) Hi Mike !  Yes, a poet transgressor !! (don't know what u do elsewhere... )And that's a great idea, let's have an Award for transgressors. I hereby propose to Lori (beep beep, Looooooooooooooooooori.....??) that she add a plaque to her long list of awards: one for super original stuff, cool layouts, nothing trad, inventive language and whatever else constitutes lawlessness in verse... [marquee]:p     [/marquee]As far as I'm concerned, you've earned your badge already Check ya later, Syl  Psssstt - oh Psyche .... Why GollY! I know the PUUURRRRFECT :kitty: award! The Faery Award fits your idea here.....  Whatcha think? 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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| Guest_Billydo_* |
Aug 16 05, 16:16
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Hi Cleo
Thanks you very much. I'm pleased you enjoyed my transgression. Cheers Mike :devil: |
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Aug 16 05, 22:15
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 8,865 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Cleo !
Psssstt - oh Psyche .... Why GollY! I know the PUUURRRRFECT award! The Faery Award fits your idea here..... Whatcha think? Arghhhh !!!!  :p  But if ya ain't got anything more transgressive for this rebel called Mike, then it's the Faery Award, definitely. I shall try to find my way back to the Nom's forum right away... and once there, I shall make one of my own transgressive suggestions for Noms that nobody takes note of....ha...ha.... Arghhhhh......!!! Wonderful poem, Mike, don't mind me, I'm the one that starts arguments and then slips off to have a beer with me pals...  Best, Sylvia ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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| Guest_Billydo_* |
Aug 17 05, 02:21
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Ooh ta!
I'm of to the Lake District to wander lonely with my Pink Things in th'ills for a few days. Catch yer at weekend. Mike |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
 Aug 17 05, 02:35
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Hi Mike....
I take it your yellow things are already there? (Somewhat unseasonally). Have fun. J. |
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| Guest_Billydo_* |
Aug 17 05, 03:28
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Ta James
Just killin' time while they complete their ablutions ... snore. M |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
Aug 17 05, 03:40
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M,
You haven't built them a bathroom each??? Rod for your own back, if you ask me! J. |
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Aug 19 05, 05:21
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Mosaic Master Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Congrats Mike on your faery award winning tile!
 Well done!   ~Cleo :) ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner |
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| Guest_Nina_* |
Aug 19 05, 06:44
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Hi Mike
Congratulations on your Faery Award for this poem and the reminder of how I have felt many a time - Argh.... Nina |
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| Guest_Jox_* |
Aug 19 05, 07:23
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Well done Mike - "Join MM and get a Free Faery" - now how's that for an offer?
Hope the Lakes' trudging is going well. All the best, J. |
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| Guest_Cathy_* |
Aug 19 05, 08:26
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Congratulations on a well deserved award!!
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| Guest_Don_* |
Aug 19 05, 09:02
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Congrats on you latest award.
Don |
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