A Cold Villanelle ** Options

[anaisa]

revision~


When British folks get sick they just don’t care.
You won’t see them with Vicks or Sudafed,
They cough and sneeze while germs fly everywhere.

They stroll with t-shirts on, in chilly air.
They kiss “hello” “goodbye.” That’s how things spread!
When British folks get sick they just don’t care.

The Brits do not wear gloves when they prepare
A meal for customers, who when they're fed,
Sense grimy little germs are everywhere.

They’re paid a handsome sick-leave, but declare:
I’m almost better, I can’t lie in bed.
When British folks get sick, they just don’t care.

The Yanks scream: I’m contagious, so beware!
Then hole up in their rooms with broth and bread,
To keep their germs from going everywhere.

The Brits are tough, they suck it up. It’s fair
To say they’ll carry on until half-dead.
When British folks get sick they just don’t care.
They cough and sneeze while germs fly everywhere.









My light verse is pretty hit and miss. I hesitate to even put this up, but I can use help on it for sure.
Forgive me British friends, after spending 2 months in England I came up with this while I sneezed in my room.


When British folks get sick they just don’t care.
You won’t see them with Vicks or Sudafed,
They let their germy kids go everywhere.

They stroll with t-shirts on, in chilly air.
They kiss “hello” “goodbye” that’s how things spread—
When British folks get sick they just don’t care.

The Brits do not wear gloves when they prepare
A meal for customers, who when they're fed,
Sense grimy little germs are everywhere.

They’re paid a handsome sick-leave, but declare:
I’m almost better, I can’t lie in bed.
When British folks get sick, they just don’t care.

The Yanks scream: I’m contagious, so beware!
Then hole up in their rooms so it won’t spread,
And keep their germs from going everywhere.

The Brits are tough, they suck it up. It’s fair
To say they’ll carry on until half-dead.
When British folks get sick they just don’t care.
They cough and sneeze while germs fly everywhere.

[anaisa]

Hi Larry and Luce,

"since" doesn't really work because it is all one sentence.

The Brits do not wear gloves when they prepare A meal for customers, who when they're fed, Sense grimy little germs are everywhere.

I don't see the issue with "sense" I'm afraid. The customers see the food being prepared with the owners bare hands, it causes the customers to sense there may be germs associated with the meal. Just like animals sense danger, or rain, it's a feeling based on the environment. No?