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 Dec 6 03, 12:31
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 Egyptian  Posts: 388 Joined: 26-October 03 From: Southeast USA Member No.: 37 Real Name: Jan Writer of: Poetry  |
When poems dance,
a creative mind's floor shakes. Ooh la la! Boom, bah boom! Boom, boom! Bah boom! Listen to the rhythm of the words. Words wildly swish this way and that, first over here, then over there. Scat, words, scat! Like ABC's in vegetable soup, letters by themselves, some in a group. Ooh la la! Boom, bah boom! Boom, boom! Bah boom! Listen to the rhythm of the words. Rhymes change. Rhythms rearrange. Moods adjust. Tempo's tamed. Words just sigh, often out of breath, "Ahhh, a second wind- got a hold of myself!" Get up, words! Come on! Let's dance! Time to create new-word romance, never-used phrases, brand new rhymes. You know you're having a grand old time! Let's go to a place we've never been. Get up, words! Let's do it again! Listen to the rhythm of the words. Ooh la la! Boom, bah boom! Boom, boom! Bah boom! Listen to the rhythm of the words. What is that? What do you hear? Your mind's floor is...what? ...shakin', you say? Ooh la la! Boom, boom! Bah boom! What a chance you'll be takin' when poems dance today, when poems dance today, when poems dance today! Šjtl2003 ·······  ······· |
  
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Dec 6 03, 12:49
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
YES_ MY FAVORITE J POEM HAS ARRIVED! :dance: :dance: :dance: :operagal: :operagal: :operagal:
I'm sorry, but there's so much to LOVE about this piece! Do ya really want a crit? :knight: HUGS! ~Cleo :pharoah2 :pharoah: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Dec 6 03, 13:21
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Egyptian Posts: 388 Joined: 26-October 03 From: Southeast USA Member No.: 37 Real Name: Jan Writer of: Poetry |
Oh, Cleo, Oh, Cleo!!
:jester:  Let's dance the poetic dance!!! :jester: I'm sooooooo glad this one triggers some 'happy' for you! It does for me...and I was hoping to do the same for the reader! If you wish to critique, surely start your slicin' and dicin'! Love,  Janet ······· ······· |
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Dec 6 03, 17:45
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Jan,
can we do this to the cha-cha-cha. This is pure musioetry. Will stir up the cobwebs of anyones muse. And you used all the good words to nudge the poetic wallflowers to dance.          Larry 
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Dec 6 03, 17:56
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Egyptian Posts: 388 Joined: 26-October 03 From: Southeast USA Member No.: 37 Real Name: Jan Writer of: Poetry |
Whooohoooo, Larrrrrry!
You've nudged so many great characters to join in the poetic dance!! Just lovvvvvvvin' the wonderful visuals you've put together for us!!!  :dance: :snowman: To Poetic Cheer!!! :dance: Thank you for waltzin' in here. Janet ······· ······· |
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Dec 7 03, 05:16
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 2,587 Joined: 9-August 03 From: Australia Member No.: 17 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry |
This is the happiest fun with words,happy ...happy...good feeling...most sensational poem I ever READ
 [marquee]bRavo [/marquee]  Arnieeeeeeeeeeeee.............the Fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiin :operagal:
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Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner   |
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Dec 7 03, 08:46
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Egyptian Posts: 388 Joined: 26-October 03 From: Southeast USA Member No.: 37 Real Name: Jan Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE(Arnfinn @ Dec. 07 2003, 04:16) This is the happiest fun with words,happy ...happy...good feeling...most sensational poem I ever READ [marquee]bRavo [/marquee] Arnieeeeeeeeeeeee.............the Fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiin :operagal: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: Dear Arnie, :dance: :dance: This is the happiest response I've ever received about this particular poem! :dance: :dance: Reading this poem does lighten my step, especially mentally, when my muse wants to sit around accomplishing very little. I know we all need recesses and vacations>>>but you know how pushy you have to be sometimes when that muse tries to behave in a stubborn way while we are offering to assist in wonderful word weavings! THANK YOU KINDLY FOR SUCH A HAPPY RESPONSE. I'M GLAD THIS POEM HAS MET ITS PURPOSE! :sings: Take care~everywhere. :sings: Janet ······· ······· |
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Dec 7 03, 12:56
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Dear Orion
May I say (as a Compliment ! ) that much of this reminds me of Dr Zeuss - how do you spell that name ? The Cat in the Hat's "Poetry Primer", and that's that ! Love Alan |
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Dec 7 03, 14:19
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Egyptian Posts: 388 Joined: 26-October 03 From: Southeast USA Member No.: 37 Real Name: Jan Writer of: Poetry |
QUOTE(Alan @ Dec. 07 2003, 11:56) Dear Orion May I say (as a Compliment ! ) that much of this reminds me of Dr Zeuss - how do you spell that name ? The Cat in the Hat's "Poetry Primer", and that's that ! Love Alan Dear Alan, I will accept your compliment gladly! As I am a teacher of second graders, often the 'rhyming side of the poet-lady within' is Dr. Seuss-influenced. We often share Dr. Seuss and the likes in my classroom. It certainly allows the goofy, simplistic thoughts and ideas to fly free. ...and the shared smiles and giggles are certainly worth it! Cheers to you, Janet ······· ······· |
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Dec 8 03, 18:41
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry |
Ah Janny-Pooh,
 This did stimulatethe twist.... I so enjoyed it... Daniah ······· ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
"A good book is not read and forgotten. It lingers in the mind of the reader, reshaping thoughts, asking new questions, revisiting ancient ones." MM Award Winner |
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Jul 22 04, 14:52
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great write, made me smile
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Jul 23 04, 11:11
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,660 Joined: 23-August 03 From: Somerset, England Member No.: 22 Real Name: Grace Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Hi Janet
Well, if that doesn't stir the muse - nothing will  It woke me out of an afternoon stupor, and that takes some doing, believe me!!  I am going to copy this to prod me whenever Madame Muse goes AWOL. Love Grace 
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