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Psyche
Posted on: Jul 18 19, 20:18


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QUOTE (Larry @ Jul 12 19, 23:49 ) *
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UNUSUAL


Under Normal Usage Some Udders Always Leak

MILKING


Mankind insanely likes killing insects naturally good


MANKIND
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RECOVER


Rapid Electric Currents Offer Verifiably Effective Reductions

CURRENT


Cannot Understand Recent Replacement Entire Natural Trails

NATURAL
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Great to find you here as well, Bev. Great that you've taken up painting. Some of the challenges here go with a painting to inspire you. Have you seen them?

I hope you've no health troubles? I've had a pretty rough year, first a kidney stone that got stuck half way down its way out. The pain was horrid and fortunately daughter Diana was here, so she took me to E.R. I had an endoscope down below and the doc found two tiny stones blocking the passageway. My kidney was full of nasty fluids and I could have lost it... I'm going for my umpteenth check up in a couple of hours.

Meanwhile, my Fibromyalgia is almost intolerable, despite medication. I'll be seeing a Pain Specialist, in the hopes of getting a prescription for medical marihuana, which is finally legal in Argentina. It's always been easily available, but I'd rather get a proper prescription and buy it from a lisenced provider. Tried the stuff before, with no luck.

Have you been getting around at all? Do you ever see Wally and his wife? You must have grandchildren now? Maybe you can share pictures on FB, everybody seems to be there, despite the scandals. I suspect there's some kind of witch hunt going on, Mark Z. supplied our profiles for a study in Cambridge University, to a supposedly honest professor in Psychology. But they ended up elsewhere...

All the same, I didn't sign any of those petitions against him. He should be fined, perhaps, as Google was in the E.U. These guys have always had all our info, I just search for something to buy Online, and the advs follow me for ages! Even to poetry websites...LOL..

Bye for now, another greeting to Daniel and best of luck to you, Bev. I'll return here if Lori ever retakes her admin work. Everything went downhill when she left, we miss her as she was so active, long ago.

Love to all, Sylvia
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Posted on: May 6 18, 21:44


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Great one, RC!! Just love it when you make a recording of your work.
Following you on SoundCloud.
Congratulations,
best, Gracy
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Posted on: May 6 18, 21:26


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Oh my goodness, Daniel, I just happened to drop by and saw this news. You've certainly been thru' a rough time, so sorry.
I see that all this happened during Christmas and beyond. Your report sounds good, so I hope now in May you're totally recovered. And that you managed to lose some weight! That's important.
I seldom come to MM anymore. It makes me downright sad, almost depressed, as there are so few of you around any more. I did see that Larry posted a rondeau in Herme's. And that you all continue with the word challenges.

I've moved on to some other websites, but frankly I haven't found any poets like I've found here at MM.
They send in poems for IBPC every month. MM used to do that. I've only won some H.M.'s, whereas Eira got a 1st. prize for a lovely poem, fairly recently.

I wish you and Eileen all the best! Maybe you can take a holiday?

Take care, keep well, best,
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Posted on: Oct 1 17, 02:41


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Hi Anthony,
I hadn't seen this poem before. Been away for some time.
Enjoyed it very much. I think poets are allowed to invent neologisms such as rare-field or rarefield. Or turn nouns into verbs, etc.

I see you've had good suggestions, so I have no nits at all. Except perhaps Daniel's questions as to "what rare-field means". But I read your explanation about the 4 a.m. events, so I better get to bed, as it's now 4.30 a.m. LOL.

Best wishes and congrats on your poem.
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Posted on: Oct 1 17, 02:22


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Hi Ali,
I've come over for a visit after a long time.
And I've been fortunate in finding this lovely painting, as well as what appears to be a true love poem.
Beautifully achieved, both of them.
The ending sounds sad, I don't know whether "asleep" may mean that this beautiful lady has passed away... After all, she would awaken and could be painted then.

Never mind, I've probably opened my mouth and put my foot in it. Please forgive.

So glad you shared these two sentimental works of art with us.

Best wishes,
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Posted on: Oct 1 17, 02:06


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Hey James,
I dropped into MM after many months and I just listened to your signing of your own lyrics!
What a treat...
I hadn't heard this one anywhere else, but perhaps I missed it, as I'm trying to do too much stuff and get fatigued.
So lucky me, best,
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Posted on: Oct 1 17, 01:42


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Very amusing, dark humor, Ali.
I had myself a good laugh.
Bring 'em on!
Best wishes,
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Posted on: Oct 1 17, 01:32


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What a lovely tribute to Princess Di, the people's Queen of Hearts. Did you know that, amongst the loads of flowers placed at the gates of Buckingham Palace by weeping people, there were dozens of actual cards of the Queen of Hearts?

Diana had once said that she didn't aspire to be a Royal Highness any more, as that right had already been taken away from her, so she would be pleased to be the people's Queen of Hearts, just that.

Adding to your list of charities or foundations she headed, was the Aids Foundation and a Mental Health charity, both of which pissed off the Queen. She visited lepers and shook hands with them, in poor countries. She had no problem holding poverty stricken children in her lap, wherever she visited. I'm convinced that she did it due to her enormous empathy with these people, which included the elderly in Britain... and so on.

Did you get to see the documentary aired on the 20th. anniversary of her death? I was able to see it on NatGeo channel in English, as well as on local TV programs, but dubbed into Spanish. I was somewhat amazed at the softness of her spoken voice, even when she was asked about the worst periods of her life, especially Charles's infidelity with Camilla.

"... Bright streams of flowers, laid with care,
were tributes from their grief and love.
The whole world paused in silent prayer
as Heaven praised a rose above."

Just love these lines, so true. She was loved worldwide. Both her wedding and her funeral were televised to millions of people. So sad...

Thanks for sharing your stretched sonnet with us, after so many years.
Best.
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Posted on: Aug 12 17, 01:13


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Hi Daniel, sun.gif
Thanks so much for taking valuable time off to scan my ballad. And I'm especially sorry that you lost the first draft due to computer troubles. That's so terribly discouraging, so I'm all the more grateful for your assistance.

Now I have to study both your's and Larry's suggestions, so it will take me a while to get my act together... LOL.

I've put "adiós" with its correct pronunciation, that's why it's in italics.

As for "winka", it's the indigenous term for "white man", "stranger" and finally "liar". It can be spelt in various ways, such as "wingka" or "huinca" (the 'h' is soundless). As mapuzungun was an oral language, same as most very ancient idioms, there are now about three dictionaries by different authors. The most accepted is the one that uses the European 'w' and 'k', and others. The usage of 'h' is of Spanish origin. It has no sound, no 'g' or 'j' pronunciation, so it's really 'ui' that sounds like 'w'. Do I make it clear? Can't go over this again coz my Fibromyalgia is killing me.

I'll work on this and try to better the meter.
Many thanks once again,
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QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Aug 11 17, 13:52 ) *
Greetings, Sylvia...

I too had been working on your piece for some time, but unfortunately there must have been some computer update the other day, and it erased all my work on the program that I was using! Frustrated, I gave up... but I'm back to try to recoup some of what I'd observed.

You have here a very nice ballad which is for the most part in iambic hexameter. With a little work, the significant variations can be shifted with the suggestions that I offer... which of course you may take or toss:

PATAGONIA LOST

In many ways I’ve left behind the dreams and loves
I cherished most, and yet as years go by the word
adiós still binds me to the coos of turtledoves;
[italicizing and accenting "adios" suggest the Spanish rather than English pronunciation, which is close to iambic]
the glare of Austral skies, where in which a circling bird

swoops down to snatch a creature fleeing in the brush.
Of trails Tehuelche braves had stalked in bygone days,
or nomads' camps safe from the Holy Grail's dark rush;
before the winka sliced the steppes with to forge railways
[I could find no information about the "winka" !! What were they?]

forged by with peasant slaves to traffic Remingtons, or purged
the patterned prairies of swift jaguars and ñandus. [no e in plural]
Great concrete dams and buzzing pylons then emerged
on cactus lands, and carcasses shed lucent hues

on llanos swept anhydrous by the wailing winds.
Thus memory is laced with fuzzy images
of childhood pastures 'till my heartstrings pluck, chagrined;
my thoughts will not let go despite the ravages

of time and loss. So to the present day I smile
at all my lost or wayward worlds -red horizons
at lost or wayward worlds, horizon's deep maroon
receding in a cone of plangent light- meanwhile
some spirit(s) summons (me) from a crowded pantheon(s)

of Patagonian lore. Held captive of the fading greying
tones that grip my heart or force an odd grimace embrace
that clings to phantom walls, I cannot rouse the swaying
poplar trees, nor speak to you, caress your face.

Well, there it is, Sylvia... as close to Iambic Hexameter as I could shift it. By the way, if you read the last verse as I hear it, the extra syllable of the 1st and 3rd lines bleeds into the "missing" syllable of lines 2 and 4.

deLighting always in your sharing, Daniel sun.gif
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Hi Larry,
Wow, thank you for going to such a lot of trouble trying to get proper metrics into my ballad.
I've been reading all your suggestions twice over. So now I'm too tired to do any editing! I have to absorb everything and make sure I've understood the word changes. A lot seem wonderful to me, whereas others confuse me. But I'm tired now, as I said.
I didn't know that you had my book Patagonia Lost!
I have this habit of changing my poems each time I read them. Then I keep several versions in my files. I'm posting in some other forums, so that's when the changes happen.
I'll try to get back asap.
Thank you again, best,
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QUOTE (Ali zonak @ Aug 4 17, 16:29 ) *
QUOTE (Psyche @ Aug 4 17, 01:17 ) *
I've posted this poem here because it has end rhymes. Not all perfect ones.
I'm mostly interested in a few suggestions to give the lines some sort of fixed form, perhaps changing some words to achieve that. I don't want a complete re-write of my poem, so if it's too complicated don't take the trouble!
Thanks a lot!

PATAGONIA LOST

In many ways I’ve left behind the dreams and loves
I cherished most, and yet as years go by the word
adios still binds me to the coos of turtledoves;
the glare of Austral skies, where a circling bird

swoops to snatch a creature fleeing in the brush.
Of trails Tehuelche braves stalked in bygone days,
or nomad’s camps safe from the Holy Grail rush;
before winka sliced the steppes with railways

forged by slaves to traffic Remingtons, or purged
the patterned prairies of jaguars and ñandues.
Concrete dams and buzzing pylons emerged
on cactus lands, carcasses shed lucent hues

on llanos swept anhydrous by the wailing winds.
Thus memory is laced with fuzzy images
of childhood pastures… heartstrings
my thoughts will not let go despite the ravages

of time and loss. So to the present day I smile
at all my lost or wayward worlds -red horizons
receding in a cone of plangent light- meanwhile
spirits summon me from crowded pantheons

of Patagonian lore. Captive of the fading
tones that grip my heart or force an odd grimace
cling to phantom walls, I cannot rouse the swaying
poplar trees, nor speak to you, caress your face.

by Psyche.






Hello Psyche,
you are right, there are a few near-rhymes (such as grimace/face) contained in your poem, but I have a tendency to ignore those, especially if a story line is as good as yours. I would suggest that you set your poem in iambic pentameter, meaning five metric feet, ta TUM / ta TUM / ta TUM / ta TUM / ta TUM. The reason being that your lines are already long--for the most part, and the Iambic foot is the most common in the English language (see Shakespeare's Sonnets). For proper hyphenation, for the sake of syllable count and accentuation, I would consult Merian Webster's dictionary.
Sorry, I'm not the greatest critic, especially since I just had fatty tissue removed; the anesthesia's after-effects--well, that's something else to write about, lol. It's great to see you write again, Psyche. Ali


Hi Ali,
I always write several near rhymes in my ballad type poems. I find it far too restrictive to use only perfect rhymes.
Thanks so much for reading and suggesting. I'll think about the iambic pentameter.
And I do hope you're feeling better after your surgery. As I know you use humor a lot in your ballads, perhaps you'll be well enough to joke about that! Hope so, anyway.
Best, butterfly.gif Sylvia

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Posted on: Aug 10 17, 23:01


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butterfly.gifHi Ali,
I've moved your lovely lighthouses over to Acropolis as well, for the weekly MM challenges.
I've left them in Hermes, because I don't know whether you wish them to remain.
Please let me know, so that members know that the challenge is set up.
Best,
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Hey Ali, we can use your wife's original painting in Acropolis to inspire poems. We've done that in the past. What do you say?
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I've posted this poem here because it has end rhymes. Not all perfect ones.
I'm mostly interested in a few suggestions to give the lines some sort of fixed form, perhaps changing some words to achieve that. I don't want a complete re-write of my poem, so if it's too complicated don't take the trouble!
Thanks a lot!

PATAGONIA LOST

In many ways I’ve left behind the dreams and loves
I cherished most, and yet as years go by the word
adios still binds me to the coos of turtledoves;
the glare of Austral skies, where a circling bird

swoops to snatch a creature fleeing in the brush.
Of trails Tehuelche braves stalked in bygone days,
or nomad’s camps safe from the Holy Grail rush;
before winka sliced the steppes with railways

forged by slaves to traffic Remingtons, or purged
the patterned prairies of jaguars and ñandues.
Concrete dams and buzzing pylons emerged
on cactus lands, carcasses shed lucent hues

on llanos swept anhydrous by the wailing winds.
Thus memory is laced with fuzzy images
of childhood pastures… heartstrings
my thoughts will not let go despite the ravages

of time and loss. So to the present day I smile
at all my lost or wayward worlds -red horizons
receding in a cone of plangent light- meanwhile
spirits summon me from crowded pantheons

of Patagonian lore. Captive of the fading
tones that grip my heart or force an odd grimace
cling to phantom walls, I cannot rouse the swaying
poplar trees, nor speak to you, caress your face.

by Psyche.



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Hi again, Lori! JackBox.gif
Yep, we had our accidents in February, but I don't remember the date.
Moving is certainly complicated. It won't be before our Spring. More snow is predicted for this weekened.

You appear to have had a longer recuperation time. Two surgeries? So sorry about that. Will you be able to use compression socks to keep the swelling down? I got some really good cotton ones. Use them every day. Not sure about hot summer days, but on the other hand, if I move to a milder climate I'll walk a lot more and that will keep the swelling down.

Yes, I also find it difficult to use my smartphone for anything more than a few lines. Clumsy me. Young people are so fast, it's amazing.

We're all looking forward to your return to MM, Lori. Even if you post oldies, OK? cloud9.gif

I'm going to post something now, for the first time in about 2 years!

Take care, hugs,
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Jul 29 17, 08:30 ) *
Why hello wave.gif Syl!

I am still very sorry to hear all you've been through!! I think our trauma happened around the same time? My accident occurred on Feb. 7th. I'm very glad to hear you are up and moving around as we chatted a little bit on FB about. And I'm moving maybe a little complicated however you got to do what's best for you in the long run. Glad to hear you've made some new friends! hsdance.gif

I check in and read often but using my phone has been difficult as a means to reply. I do intend to get in here using my laptop, now that I'm sort of finally back to normal. Started PT this week to get my foot flexible enough to walk soon. Six months of immobility makes it complicated. Can't post from work, so I'll need to plan time at home.

Hugs and best wishes always! GroupHug.gif
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Thank you, Ali, for your kind comments. Falling is bad!
I think I'll post something now. In Hermes.
All the best and enjoy life and poetry,
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Hi Ali and welcome to Mosaic Musings.

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I'm a little late greeting you because I had an accident about 3 months ago, but I've been a member of MM for many years.
I've already read some of your poetry in the various forums. Enjoyed them very much.
I don't think I've posted anything recently, but have made a few comments.
I used to enjoy putting up the challenges in the Acropolis forum. These are not competitions, they are ideas to get poets inspired. A challenge to oneself.
So maybe I'll set up soon.
I hope you feel at home at Mosaic Musings!
Best,
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sun.gif Yep, we've had a tough time. I keep thinking back about my stupid fall inside a bungalow. No steps, no obstacles of any kind. Plop! Ouch! Still, I've been searching Internet about falls of people who have Fibromyalgia. And there I think I found the explanation. We have between 3 and 10% more chances of falling than other people. Period.
Daniel, I hope your pain specialist finds a solution for your leg trouble. But pain specialist give you exactly what you've been trying to avoid: pain meds. I take Tramadol 50mg. with Paracetamol 500mg. It keeps the pain tolerable, except on exceptional days. The harsh winter climate this year hasn't helped, it's the worst in decades.
Climate change involves extremes of heat, cold, storms, floods, etc.

Hey, I don't understand why the 'g' doesn't work. Can't you just take the keyboard to be fixed? When keyboards get really old, one usually just throws them out and buys another one.

I have lovely memories of my childhood and adolescence without Internet! I did an awful lot of reading, horseback riding, bicycling or getting up to mischief.

Thanks for the empathy, and I'll be thinking of you as well. Best of luck,
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QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Jul 26 17, 11:33 ) *
You and Lori have really been through it! I've seen a pain management specialist for my leg trouble; I'm trying to stay away from pain meds so far. Just walking with cane or rolling walker. Only other trouble is 'g' key on my computer. May have to send the whole computer in just to get that fixed! Oh, how silly our difficulties seem, huh. Remember those days before the internet?

empathizing with you, Daniel sun.gif

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Hi Daniel,
Great use of the rondeau form. And yes, I also like your use of street language. Makes it more genuine and entertaining. You're good at that. I don't think I could manage it properly due to the fact that I was taught English formerly in a bilingual school. My parents always spoke to me in English.
Nowadays I hardly speak English at all, except sometimes to my daughter.

Nice saying Hello to God, though I don't expect you actually see him! That would imply a vision. The nearest I get to "seeing God", is when I meditate and focus on my inner or third eye, which lies in the middle of my lower forehead. It comes and goes, and is never the same.

A pleasure to visit you here. Been a long time. Will return to read Larry's poems, must be off to bed now.
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Hi Ali,
Highly amusing poem. Glad you posted it.
Not sure whether you mean two dachshunds, or two people (hubby/wife, or partners), who adopted one dog. But it doesn't matter. It doesn't change my feelings about this original piece.
Thanks for sharing,
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Hi Ali,
I enjoyed your poem about your rather unfortunate stay in Venice. Such a beautiful city, been there myself, but about two decades ago.
Your last stanza about the headboard pounding, the giggling and "la puttana" made me laugh.
And no, I've never taken group tours. We used to go to any town's Tourism Center to get a list of B&B's, also maybe perfectly acceptable travelling salesmen's hotels. Never could afford much else. We were young and adventuresome, had great times.

Since I've widowed, I still wish to travel, so perhaps I'd consider a group tour nowadays. Need some company.

Thanks for sharing your experiences. Capri was marvelous. Places have changed such a lot. Greece and its islands were simple and friendly. Small inns near beaches were charming. Perhaps it's not a good idea to visit them again.

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Posted on: Jul 25 17, 00:02


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Hi Antony,
I see you've had plenty of good suggestions already. I only think that L4 sounds a little old-fashioned.
The other point I observe is the use of "din" for outside leaves. I can't imagine leaves making a din.
And maybe it's just me, but in L5 you say the room is silent, so it appears contradictory, unless it's in some way metaphorical.
I'll return for another read.
Enjoyed your poem despite these small nits.
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QUOTE (greenwich @ Jul 2 17, 17:16 ) *
The wayfarer finds himself in the Autumn room
The din of outside leaves invites the tremble of truth
The man's heart sinks, for he has no tidings
Many dark paths has he evaded
but the silence
of this room is like no other

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Posted on: Jul 24 17, 23:46


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Hi Eira,
Dropped in for a few minutes and saw this lovely, nostalgic poem of yours. It really strikes me in several ways, reminding me of losses of loved ones.
Nothing to critique at all, except perhaps the word "twang". Just me, I'm sure, but it sounds out of place in your poem. Maybe "accent", "timbre", "tone", "intonation".
Just saying, take or toss!
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