Pandora's February Challenge, The Gate - A Sonnet Options

[Larry]

The Gate

Though some discerning eyes perhaps would see
fair woodland track where wayward feet had led;
I, realizing in my reverie,
had trodden where pale rainbows might have wed.

Chimerical in mien, its sparkling hues
regaled the eyes through lavender’s embrace
from blooms piled on the path. They covered shoes
and footprints left behind without a trace.

Wisteria had crowned each ancient tree
and gifted them with robes, now shimmering
in errant sunbeams; golden panoply
was heralding the pageantry of Spring

but elderly, I comprehend my fate.
The path I’d found led to a pearly gate.

Words used: discerning, wayward, trodden, chimerical, sparkling, lavender, shimmering, spring, elderly

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Larry,

What a fabulous reply AND you used all the words, when only three were required - MARVELOUS!


Though some discerning eyes perhaps would see
fair woodland track where wayward feet had led;
I, realizing in my reverie,
had trodden where pale rainbows might have wed.
Oh - I just LOVE this opening - I see the path in a new 'light'! Nature = untold beauty!

Chimerical in mien, its sparkling hues
regaled the eyes through lavender’s embrace
from blooms piled on the path. They covered shoes
and footprints left behind without a trace.
Sweet!

Wisteria had crowned each ancient tree
and gifted them with robes, now shimmering
in errant sunbeams; golden panoply
was heralding the pageantry of Spring

but elderly, I comprehend my fate.
The path I’d found led to a pearly gate.
You DO have a gift of imagery, and your sweet internal rhythm is very good (Heavenly), Larry! I've enjoyed this poem immensely!

Thanks for the read!
~Cleo

[Larry]

Hi Lori,

Thank You very much for your praise and obvious enjoyment. Thanks also for putting the picture at the top of the poem. I tried four or five times to link to the picture you had posted in the challenge but was unable to do so.

It was difficult to get all nine words in the poem with "elderly" being the most difficult because, even though I'm nearly 70, I do not feel elderly at all and hope I don't find myself striding up the path to the pearly gate any time soon.

Larry

[Psyche]

Hi Larry,
I finally made it to Pandora's. And I'm so glad I'm here!
As in all of your sonnets, you conjure up stunning, gentle images. And nearly always about nature.
What an amazing gift you have...combining given words with your own astounding imagination.
You leave me speechless.

Wisteria had crowned each ancient tree
and gifted them with robes, now shimmering
in errant sunbeams; golden panoply
was heralding the pageantry of Spring

but elderly, I comprehend my fate.
The path I’d found led to a pearly gate.

I love this unexpected ending, after the lovely stanza with wisteria, errant sunbeams, golden panoply and so on.
Of course you have no intention of passing thru' the pearly gate. Much too soon! Just take a look at it, then return along the same wondrous path you've created.

Do keep on doing this challenge. I feel enticed to try my hand at it. But I would begin with FV, sorry!
Syl

[Larry]

Hi Syl,

Glad you finally visited this little niche of the forums. I dearly love the challenges and shall continue trying my best to answer each one. FV is great when doing these because it gives one more freedom and is not nearly as difficult.

If someone wants to put up a challenge, I'll be glad to answer poetically or otherwise. Just let me know the parameters involved and I shall meet or exceed them to the best of my abilities. They are a wonderful goad to the old muse.

Larry

p.s. Don't want to see the pearly gates any time soon either.

[Psyche]

No, indeed, the pearly gates can remain metaphorical, as far as I'm concerned!!

Hey, you've given me an idea for the next challenge.

Take care,
Syl

Hi Syl,

Glad you finally visited this little niche of the forums. I dearly love the challenges and shall continue trying my best to answer each one. FV is great when doing these because it gives one more freedom and is not nearly as difficult.

If someone wants to put up a challenge, I'll be glad to answer poetically or otherwise. Just let me know the parameters involved and I shall meet or exceed them to the best of my abilities. They are a wonderful goad to the old muse.

Larry

p.s. Don't want to see the pearly gates any time soon either.