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Larry
post Dec 2 13, 00:00
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Hi Lori,

Thanks for the praise and for the read. It wouldn't have happened except for Daniel's last line before his refrain. I don't know if using the last line as a lead-in to the next post is a requisite in this venue but after reading it, the idea popped into my head and the poem just came out.

Again, Thanks,

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post Nov 12 14, 11:22
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What does it mean?

What does it mean to please someone?
Do anything to get along?
or should I work to understand,
befriend, and try to lend a hand?
At times, the process won't be fun.

What pleases God? Look to His Son.
Attend His Word; know right from wrong.
What's PC? No! Seek true peace, and
What does it mean?

Is there something that will atone?
Can we talk on the telephone?
To reconcile's no magic wand;
relationships have shifting sand.
Ask God to guide; don't act alone.
What does it mean?

© MLee Dickens'son 2014



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post Nov 17 14, 18:28
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What Larry Saw

What Larry saw… Daniel’s request
was thought, at first, to be a jest
but asterisks, from one to three
meant some critique was asked of me
so off I ran at his behest.

“What does it mean” was not the best
Rondeau he’s written, I'd have guessed;
near rhyme and verse were metrically
what Larry saw.

Could this be ruse or just a test
from he whose tongue always caressed
his cheek? I guessed it was a plea
but I was wrong from “a” to “z”.
My brain’s shut down for I’ve confessed
what Larry saw.

S2/L2 did end with "probably"

Thanks for the heads-up Daniel.


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post Nov 21 14, 14:59
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What Larry saw was quite correct.
It's not critique that I reject...
but that my thoughts were garbled so
that in this form they couldn't grow
the way that readers should expect.

What I had meant won't intersect
within this style, so I elect
to chuck it. It could undergo
what Larry saw.

Though his conception does reflect
a bit of mine; I can't perfect
what I had meant to say, although
there's value in what my Rondeau
had stumbled on. Who'll resurrect
what Larry saw?


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post Dec 10 14, 00:24
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I saw the endless meanings which
could be inferred with just a switch
when Daniel wanted to expound
on introspective thoughts. I found
he wanted help. With fever pitch,

I jumped right in to scratch his itch;
examining each nook and niche.
To ascertain where he was bound,
I saw the end

but it was not! So much more rich
in nuance I construed as glitch
and connotations too profound
to understand. I nearly drowned!
His explanations did bewitch.
I saw the end.


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post Jan 14 15, 14:50
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Within the swamp are brackish pools
where gators wait for food and fools
from towns and cities far away.
Sometimes they stumble in to stay
and ripen where the gator drools

but that’s not taught in any schools.
With knowledge and the proper tools
some folks can work or live and play
within the swamp.

My friend gets rich. He and his mules
go out to where bald cypress rules
and finds old sunken logs which pay
their weight in gold. Without decay
these fallen giants are nature’s jewels
within the swamp.


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post Jul 2 17, 19:22
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Hey, Larry! Sorry I had not read your above piece somehow! Not sure what kept me away from this thread....

though perhaps it was my frustration with not being able to fit my thoughts in the piece a few entries back, within the rondeau format!

Here's one that I wrote in church this morning while the minister was preaching on the subject. [It's been some time since I've done that.] I had the opportunity actually to share it at the conclusion of his message before the closing worship and praise song... which is posted for critique in Hermes:


To Meet With God

To meet with God in worship, I
bow down to lift my voice and cry
out, Holy Lord... I know Your rod
of justice humbles me, who's flawed.
Your grace is in the morning sky.

I need Your Word so I'll apply
it to my heart and to You fly
with friends who meet, though we're too blah'd
to meet with God.

I say, Hello and do not lie,
I'm glad to see you! But I sigh,
I need some quiet to be awed...
a moment just to rest my bod.
I've mostly come here to draw nigh
to meet with God.

© MLeeDickensson 02 July 2017

during a sermon on Worship in church



P.S. Larry, perhaps you could post your gator piece in Hermes as well. I'd love to comment on it. I really like it!! It's definitely NOT a croc!


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post Jul 4 17, 20:29
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Shame on you Daniel. Not listening to the sermon! It is a beautiful Rondeau and perhaps was sent to you as a silent sermon from the Man upstairs.

Larry


My Home

I come here mostly to draw nigh
to folks who’ll help me to apply
my craft of writing poems and prose;
elsewhere might do but I compose
within these halls and wouldn’t try

to leave this place. I won’t say bye
for friends I’ve made; some few are nigh
who still remain. The rest; who knows?
I come here most

and probably, until I die
will write with wit though some is wry
but you may like it I suppose.
So everyone who visits knows
I come here most.


S2/L2 did end with: there’s lots of those

Thanks again Daniel.


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post Jul 6 17, 14:16
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Wow, Larry!!

That is one of those that we post here occasionally that deserve a wider audience. PLEASE post it in Hermes Homilies.

By the way, there's no shame in my writing during the sermon. Some years ago a minister friend told me, I should just preach to you on Saturday and we could pass out your poem on Sunday to summarize what i'd have preached to them." LOL

deLighting in your rondeau. Perhaps I'll have a rejoinder later.

- Daniel sun.gif


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post Oct 26 17, 09:22
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My Brain

My brain shut down in disbelief;
I thought their muse left with a thief
for no one came to crit or write
a poem or prose, this was despite
the members here who cause no grief.

Much like a dying tree, each leaf
is special here, they all bequeath
the forums where they will delight
my brain.

Am I now cast on desert reef
to dream of poems stacked like a sheaf
and realize it is my plight
to see the darkness of our night?
Please share before it’s pickled beef…
my brain.


S2/L2 did end: and could bedight


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post Nov 7 17, 22:59
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A Wakening

Awakening in foggy night
with grey, before the dawn brings light,
which chills ones soul and veils my eyes;
I hear their tears as each leaf cries
and falls to earth as though contrite.

Although each year it is the plight
of those who fall to earth, bedight
for nature rules and each one dies
awakening

the cycle as the chill winds bite
and bid each red and golden kite
a sad goodbye. Winter applies
an icy shroud of white disguise
‘til seeds of Spring begin their rite,
a wakening.



S2/L2 did read: try to reach the skies

One more correction to go!


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When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
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post Nov 19 17, 12:30
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God's Presence

God's presence isn't how I feel,
that warmth when in the church I kneel,
the sentiment that's in my poems.
It's not some vision that becomes
a driving force, the Spirit's seal.

Is there some reason He'd conceal
Himself from me? why He'd not heal
me? ... then in quiet, sudden comes
God's presence.

The substance of His Word congeals;
I recognize my faith is real.
I see He's known me from the womb,
prepares for me a Heav'nly home.
Obeying Him is what reveals
God's presence.

© MLee Dickens'son 2017

during a sermon on the subject


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post Nov 20 17, 23:19
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Eternal Gifts

God’s presence felt when on my own
is something that I’ve always known
for I was raised in Christian school
where I was taught the golden rule
and breaking it I can’t condone.

His mercy He has ever shown
and without Him I'll not atone
if I forget that gracious tool;
God’s presence.

When I should die and soul has flown
to Heaven’s gate and it is thrown
wide open and I see the cool
home built for me, I know that You’ll
be there to greet me as Your own;
God’s presents.


S2/L2 did end with: I’m just a fool


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post Jul 7 18, 17:23
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Gonna break the chain here, if you don't mind, Larry:


Dinker


He owned the neighborhood where we
transplanted him to South Jersey
from Florida. We'd left his sis
but didn't think that he would miss
her all that much, 'cause he loved me

He'd jump on anything he'd see
refrigerator, bird in tree
a mouse that he would give death's kiss
He owned the neighborhood

One mouse had the audacity
to be a warfarin causality
Dink’s neck became a giant cyst
but when he healed, could not resist
the squirrels, the mice, a bird in tree
He owned the neighborhood

© MLee Dickens’son 07 July 2018


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post Jul 7 18, 22:21
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Daniel,

As noted in Hermes, S3/L1.

Seeing as how Karnak is our playground, you can break as many strings as you wish.

Larry

p.s. What "Groups" do you belong to in AP? I haven't joined one yet and am not sure how to do so.


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Thanks, Larry. Corrected... I only belong to Brevity Lovers. I dropped out of a couple of others for lack of participation. I'm also gonna find another short poem group methinks. Nice to see Doug there on the site. Have you caught up with him? (D Allen Jenkins) - deLightingly, Daniel rollerskater.gif


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post Jul 9 18, 08:34
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Hey Daniel,
I joined Brevity Lovers and found a link to your Faux-ku string. I recognized a few but not all.
Didn't find or look for Doug but I'll do so. I've been busy having to comment on two or three inane and disconnected prose offerings devoid of logical meaning for every poem I post. Of course, I can't say that at AP so I diligently search for any kind of rhyming form poetry to leave my comments. They are few and far between. It is nice to have people around though.
The experiment continues.

Larry


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post Sep 26 18, 18:00
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My Neighborhood

The neighborhood where I reside
is in the woods where one can hide
away from fools who walk this earth.
It always brings me joy and mirth;
the neighborhood, a great outside.

It’s full of trees where birds abide
and in the morning I can stride
through small game trails, there is no dearth;
the neighborhood

consists of me and my sweet bride,
a dog and four grown cats that tried
to scare a mother coon of girth
and her new kits; now grown from birth.
The neighborhood!


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post Dec 5 18, 16:03
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Now Grown

Now grown; from birth I never knew
what to expect, what would ensue
as each year passed. There was no guide
on steps to take until one died.
Yet, somehow, I have made it through

my life of seventy plus two
but still, unsure. What must I do
to know my best has been applied
now grown?

Shall I, with words and deeds, imbue
a testament of what is true
or actions which must be applied
each day? I’ll just let you decide
if I have touched hearts of a few,
now grown.


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