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> A Feline Fooling!, Senryu - Triple.
Rhymer
post Nov 29 17, 12:43
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Must get kitted out,
to get co-operation,
for fat cat, catscan!

I must ‘paws’ for thought,
before a catastrophe
furthers a lost cause.

To categorise
a fine catscan catalogue,
is the cat’s miaow!

Rhymer, November 29th, 2017.
(My first attempt at this)
 
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Larry
post Dec 30 17, 09:49
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Hey Denis,

I've been looking around the "net" for triple Senryu and found that most of them are written where the second and third Senryu follow the first's subject matter without puns or allusions. I have never written one of these although I have penned nearly 800 single Senryu.

Can't critique what I have no experience writing! They are funny which is what a Senryu is supposed to be but I think you may be "forcing" the similarities a bit.

Joke: What does a dog do when coming into a new yard? A cat-scan!

Larry


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post Jan 30 18, 05:28
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G'day Denis.

You seem to have the gist of things.

5-7-5

Where

What

When

I like your comical approach.


I'm sure Basho san would award 3 stars.



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