The Language of Flowers Options

[anaisa]

okay- I tired to do a sonnet- not the best at it, but you guys are inspiring me.


I never knew you held a rosary
of lilies in your heart, or meadows filled
with songbirds in your hand, that chirped and trilled
into the dawn. I could not sense the sea,
or brimming emerald pools that filled your days
and buoyed you up when midnight could not find
one star. Your quiet life is intertwined
with jasmine flowers, washed in amber haze
of dusk— and I now see your fortitude
in fullest bloom. It laces up the wall,
determined petals, glorious and small;
a silent strength that's often misconstrued.
As evening's muted colors touch your leaves,
I watch them wander upward to the eaves.

[Larry]

Hi Karen,

Tried to write a sonnet...? Come on, you make it look too easy. I have no nits to pick and no crits to make. 'Tis a thing of beauty and I must add just one word.

BRAVO!!!

Larry

[Psyche]

This is beautiful, Karen! I've read it several times and find it so edifying, with a twinge of loss or sorrow for something missed along the way...

I'm no meter expert, so I'll not say anything about that, except that I might post some of my own attempts at R&F for you to help me get them right!

I love the 'language of flowers', which appears to be a delicate veil conceiling, maybe, somebody's death or departure, when it's too late for the MC to holler 'Whoa, there! I wanted to tell you.....'

Thanks for sharing this deftly written piece, Karen.

Sylvia***

[Alan]

Dear Karen,

"okay- I tired to do a sonnet"

My my, what a strange start to a post containing a perfect sonnet in so many ways. Rhyme is spot on, ba-dums sound true, and the content is exactly as described within it :

glorious and small;
a silent strength that's often misconstrued.

Perfect in every way, a real gem ! And Karen, that praise from Larry is priceless - he really knows his stuff.

Any chance of "trying" another ?

Love
Alan

[anaisa]

Hi Larry,

You seriously made my day! I have written them before, but there
is always something that needs changing or whatever...
never got the "perfect stamp" from anyone ;-)

K

Hi Karen,

Tried to write a sonnet...? Come on, you make it look too easy. I have no nits to pick and no crits to make. 'Tis a thing of beauty and I must add just one word.

BRAVO!!!

Larry

[Eisa]

Hi Karen

Well if this is a 'try' at writing a sonnet - I'd like to see more. It is excellent! It's a pleasure to read your verse with great rhymes & enjambments. bring on some more! You are an asset to MM.

Snow

[anaisa]

Hi Sylvia,

Thank you for taking the time to read it and comment.
I think the thought of dying brings out the best in some people? Or it shows off a side of
them that is sometimes hidden.

Karen

This is beautiful, Karen! I've read it several times and find it so edifying, with a twinge of loss or sorrow for something missed along the way...

I'm no meter expert, so I'll not say anything about that, except that I might post some of my own attempts at R&F for you to help me get them right!

I love the 'language of flowers', which appears to be a delicate veil conceiling, maybe, somebody's death or departure, when it's too late for the MC to holler 'Whoa, there! I wanted to tell you.....'

Thanks for sharing this deftly written piece, Karen.

Sylvia***

[anaisa]

Hi Alan,

Glad you liked it- this one actually came out easily. But what I meant
about "trying" a sonnet was that I pretty much quit writing them
because they are a pain-- and I didn't think the ones I've done in the past
have turned out that well....a little line that doesn't look right, can unravel
it all, if you have to edit. So basically, I don't like writing them much.
It wasn't until I got here and got inspired by seeing them,
that I wanted to try again.

Dear Karen,

"okay- I tired to do a sonnet"

My my, what a strange start to a post containing a perfect sonnet in so many ways. Rhyme is spot on, ba-dums sound true, and the content is exactly as described within it :

glorious and small;
a silent strength that's often misconstrued.

Perfect in every way, a real gem ! And Karen, that praise from Larry is priceless - he really knows his stuff.

Any chance of "trying" another ?

Love
Alan

[anaisa]

Hi snow,

thanks for the kind words~ I appreciate them

K

Hi Karen

Well if this is a 'try' at writing a sonnet - I'd like to see more. It is excellent! It's a pleasure to read your verse with great rhymes & enjambments. bring on some more! You are an asset to MM.

Snow